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Swallow the Sun
I curl into nothingness
while you make me over with stories praising
everything you love and hate.
Tell me what I want to hear
and I promise not to believe a word of
what you can't help saying.
Swallow the sun, to
insinuate and flow as I writhe and coil
beneath your gaze.
Taking it in, yet you
haven't touched me once, only your voice
dripping words onto flesh,
sticking to the dampness
that puckers and yawns with each sensation.
It's all I need to know
as my spirit gravitates instead of imploding
without the drama.
How much easier now
to crawl inside me and bring the sun with you.
while you make me over with stories praising
everything you love and hate.
Tell me what I want to hear
and I promise not to believe a word of
what you can't help saying.
Swallow the sun, to
insinuate and flow as I writhe and coil
beneath your gaze.
Taking it in, yet you
haven't touched me once, only your voice
dripping words onto flesh,
sticking to the dampness
that puckers and yawns with each sensation.
It's all I need to know
as my spirit gravitates instead of imploding
without the drama.
How much easier now
to crawl inside me and bring the sun with you.
Published 23rd Nov 2015
| Edited 25th Nov 2015
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- Edited 23rd Nov 2015 10:43pm
23rd Nov 2015 10:42pm
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25th Nov 2015 2:16am
23rd Nov 2015 11:00pm
there are all sorts of possibilities waiting to be unlocked from your words - mythical, allegorical and sensual - all adding up to an intensity not many achieve here - without your being too dense or profound. A pleasurable read. I liked it.
25th Nov 2015 2:18am
Thank you so much, I'm glad you've shared your reading and thoughts about this piece. It makes it feel even more special to me.
24th Nov 2015 00:00am
I curl into nothingness
while you make me over
with stories praising
everything you love and hate. ...
omg. - this is both romantically cryptic and engaging ... I've spoken this but you've written this better than I ever could ..,
Salud
25th Nov 2015 2:20am
I'm almost speechless by the reading of my piece, and the enthusiasm your words render of how you embrace it. Thank you so very much. -- Jadey <3
Anonymous
24th Nov 2015 5:03am
'Taking it in, yet you
haven't touched me once,
only your voice
dripping words onto flesh'
I know of Poets who can definitely do just that;). . .~Devlin.
haven't touched me once,
only your voice
dripping words onto flesh'
I know of Poets who can definitely do just that;). . .~Devlin.
24th Nov 2015 9:42pm
28th Mar 2018 3:14am
'while you make me over with stories praising
everything you love and hate.'
i love the dichotomy of this. the idea of praising what you hate along with what you love is potent. the impact of course of those words is the heart of what you speak of...but that you are dressed with a yin yang of words makes it so much more delicious.
everything you love and hate.'
i love the dichotomy of this. the idea of praising what you hate along with what you love is potent. the impact of course of those words is the heart of what you speak of...but that you are dressed with a yin yang of words makes it so much more delicious.
Thank you, poet. With you going back to earliest works when I was a newbie member. Like seeing me through the Hubble, viewing galaxies whose light you see from when they were still far from their spiral formation. I like someone doing that since there’s no autobiography of me to be had online, just my words of verse, to get inside my head.
