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Life That Should Be Taken
I stopped
to smell a flower
A
tiny
yellow
flower
that
eyed
the
morning
sun-rise
through the tar
Just walked
between
the trucks
the motor bikes
the cars
hogging
and hooting
the motorway
bent down
to a knee
to smell the
yellow
flower
With
horrifying
speed
the determined
Vee eight
engine
proved it's
masculinity
passed us
I was left
to write the story
The flower
didn't
make
it
Sometimes the wrong prayer
is answered
or the right prayer
is answered
on the wrong
subject
[.]
Published 11th Nov 2015
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11th Nov 2015 6:30am
11th Nov 2015 8:02am
11th Nov 2015 12:43pm
The laws of chance lead us a dance
We have no choice but to participate (Until it's too late)
Poor flower had it's hour
As do we all when we are called.
With or without the prayers right or wrong
Blossom we now (But not for long)
Loved this little flower mate and loved you for noticing it, bringing it to our attention (Maybe that's why it was put there)
We have no choice but to participate (Until it's too late)
Poor flower had it's hour
As do we all when we are called.
With or without the prayers right or wrong
Blossom we now (But not for long)
Loved this little flower mate and loved you for noticing it, bringing it to our attention (Maybe that's why it was put there)
12th Nov 2015 10:24am
Oh Mr Cat
What an insightful comment, and what a magnificent view!
Holly Smacker You Listed in you Library! What an honor, Thank you so much Mr. Cat!
Al
What an insightful comment, and what a magnificent view!
Holly Smacker You Listed in you Library! What an honor, Thank you so much Mr. Cat!
Al
Anonymous
- Edited 25th Sep 2020 3:45am
11th Nov 2015 3:02pm
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12th Nov 2015 10:25am
Oh my sweet,
Your beautiful comment, brought a moment of warmth to me.
Thank you my dahlin'
Al -x-x-x-
Your beautiful comment, brought a moment of warmth to me.
Thank you my dahlin'
Al -x-x-x-
Anonymous
- Edited 11th Nov 2015 11:07pm
11th Nov 2015 11:06pm
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12th Nov 2015 10:18am
Hey Gabes,
We haven't spoken for some time...
I think that the piece's meaning to me,
Is more about whose time was it really?
Was I suppose to go... and the flower took the knock.
Or was divine plan, the end of the flower...
The irony that the flower survived perfectly well living on a motorway
until I came along to smell it.
Begs the question, whose time was it?
There for I titled it that way, to tie in with my ending,
For me the poem is more about death than life.
Thanks for your comment, bud and for asking that question. I appreciate you Gabriel, your comments are always insightful, thanks mate!
Al -x-
We haven't spoken for some time...
I think that the piece's meaning to me,
Is more about whose time was it really?
Was I suppose to go... and the flower took the knock.
Or was divine plan, the end of the flower...
The irony that the flower survived perfectly well living on a motorway
until I came along to smell it.
Begs the question, whose time was it?
There for I titled it that way, to tie in with my ending,
For me the poem is more about death than life.
Thanks for your comment, bud and for asking that question. I appreciate you Gabriel, your comments are always insightful, thanks mate!
Al -x-
13th Nov 2015 1:01am
14th Nov 2015 5:28am
Anonymous
- Edited 8th Nov 2018 00:49am
19th Nov 2015 00:00am
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16th May 2019 2:03am
It seems to me that I can see
there's more to this than meets the eye... wonderful write, my friend.., Ely
there's more to this than meets the eye... wonderful write, my friend.., Ely
