Elderberry times

This is a beautiful poem put together from a collection of haiku/Senryu (yes i counted the syllables lol)
There's a common theme running which paints the scene more vividly and with depth.
No doubt a great contender in the comp, good luck Ms. Chi :)

Thank you, Vee, too, for counting the syllables :-). Sometimes they tend go astray ...  
For the comp I will need luck, for sure! xoxo  
 
PS: I appreciate your critical AND helpful words, dear Vee. I hope I've improved the renku a bit. Actually, when writing about things that stir me up I often distance myself from the topic as not to be shaken too much.

is it the wine of the elderberry that makes you chase the sky?
beautiful poetry, Chi...

Ah ... no John! It's the berries themselves which give me the high :-).
Childhood memories, again... Thank you, again :-).

Beautiful piece. And to rhythmically haiku each phrase. ..wow!

I much appreciate your kind words, forever_young :-). For me this piece has a special meaning though
the odd thing is that I'd rather have done it in the free verse form but wasn't able to. It's the first time that I felt confined by the haiku form. Makes the mind rigid somehow.

I think because you wrote the piece with a 5 and 7 syllable rhythm it makes each verse and word selected thoughtful and personal.

Them elderberrys is good for the younguns
playfully stains  purple mouths
tussles to the ground
elderberry fight
everyon's purrple

Elderberries - childhood friends
caught them with my lips
flying high on the crooked swing
purple mouth like a bloodied wound
bittersweet

Thank you so much for your poetic words on my renku, rabbitquest  ...
I like them :-).