Laced

Welcome back Hellion!!!
Bringing back your Bad-ass Darkness!!!
O yeah-It's Excellence!!!

Ha, thanks! *grin*

Cheers, Soul, my lyrical friend.

Atakti love this masterfully penned dark ink :)

with love Crim

Thanks, Crim, for the love!

Very Nice! I love it!

Hello newbie, and welcome. Thanks so much for leaving your mark. I look forward to seeing you around.

Sweet Gabriel... :)

Thank you.

This is both sinister and beautifully written.

"Strychnine whispers
on lingering strings
dance the cruel waltz,
twist their play-things."

And "crystal drop lies" are all too easy to swallow, and believe.  Could be fatal.  Fine work!

Many thanks, crowfly, you're too kind.

My Friend.....i am ever so glad that you are--once again--sharing your amazing poetry with us!

Indeed--no one takes the readers to the Dark Side, quite like you do, and this piece certainly crosses into the ( insidious) shadows of that realm!

Lovely Lines "Laced" with  Lethality--to be sure!

Dark Enchantress, I have been away, but did miss certain poets. You are certainly one of them. Thank you again, for your uplifting comments.

This had sinister sensuality to it. Perfect for this time of year. <3

Thank you for sharing your perception on this. I do like the idea of sinister sensuality... Yes, thank you.

Masterfully crafted!  Love the flow!  Was fun reading this!  Good to see you back, Mike.

It was fun writing it. Glad to be back, and glad to see you Mike!

:)

Wwhhhooaa!! First two things that struck my mind were: pristine, brilliant...so that's what I feel this was, pristinely brilliant! :)

Hey, thanks, poetik, appreciate it. :)

I'm glad you like it.

Ok, so you've got 3 stanzas, each four lines long with an A,B,C,B rhyme scheme... this piece plays on symmetry and I like that about it. The constructive bare bones alone tie in well with the 'laced' title.  

What I like is the contrast of the first 2 lines of each stanza compared to the image portrayed in the next half of the stanza. You always have a brash image reflected into a softer image: silk cocoons > knee-jerk puppets. Poisonous whispers > beautiful lingering strings. Butterfly lashes > lies.

I love that the poem is a direct and yet subtle reincarnation of lacing itself. I'd beg to question the dark category. I actually found this quite observational, but that's just my perspective as a reader.

There's more than meets the eye here...

Thanks for the read.

Ooh, cheers for the in-depth look, Missy. Of course, most of what you found is what you noticed... I'm like the bewildered artist clutching the brush in front of the canvas and saying, "it just came out."

As for the dark category, well, yeah. I think it's dark that some people intentionally want to manipulate and deceive. I would hope it's not observational just yet, not the norm...

Thanks again!

GREAT word play! Quite a dichotomy created between the images cast. There's a seductive element in each stanza - cocoon waltz - butterfly lashes that's ultimately deadly ... devious notions - twist - drop crystal lies ...

BRAVO!

Lobo, I'm pleased you noticed the theme of silk, cocoon, butterfly. A poison lie grows more toxic the longer it waits to hatches...

Thank you so much for leaving your mark.

Very masterfully inked I like the the spooky undertones it your stanzas.

Thanks for sharing

Spooky is the flavor of this month. Be sure to spit out any spiced pumpkin anything.

Cheers for the comment!

Congratulations Atakti upon being selected as a featured Poet. This for me is full of darkness and mystery an intriguing write if there ever was one! Loved it

Thank you, blocat, for the love. I'm pleased it caught your eye.

found the seduction of the beautiful, devious butterfly,
& the lacing of her web...

Very nice. Nice ABCB rhyme. Would like to see this with a more strict meter though to see how it could come out.

Atakti, luv ~ :-*

The more I read this one, the more disturbing and unsettling I find it; mission accomplished, my dear, inimitably clever one. ;-D

There is somewhat in it that's reeking of an automatic malevolent innocence. And, it's that innocence that has me so very disconcerted, you see. Tis the unthinking and unthinkable cruelty displayed by some psychopaths, mayhap. But, psychopaths in their childhood, eh?

I fear I'm not conveying this well, luv. :-p Ah well. Suffice to say, you've effectively chilled me... ;-*