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LIFTING THE VEIL
Perched upon the rooftop.
Breath upon the window.
Gliding to your bed.
Hovering overhead.
10 cold fingers trace tattoos.
Sleeping enigma,in solitude.
Fade out of dream.
Stare into me.
In fear,or awe?
This moment burns.
With forgotten words.
In realization
this IS real.
She can't move.
10 cold fingers trace tattoos...
Breath upon the window.
Gliding to your bed.
Hovering overhead.
10 cold fingers trace tattoos.
Sleeping enigma,in solitude.
Fade out of dream.
Stare into me.
In fear,or awe?
This moment burns.
With forgotten words.
In realization
this IS real.
She can't move.
10 cold fingers trace tattoos...
Published 1st Oct 2015
| Edited 3rd Oct 2015
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1st Oct 2015 10:38pm
3rd Oct 2015 3:44am
1st Oct 2015 11:58pm
3rd Oct 2015 3:45am
2nd Oct 2015 00:27am
"10 cold fingers trace tattoos."
&
"Sleeping enigma,in solitude."
~most favored lines.. power-smacked 'em both.. sez me ;)
The deep eerie chill just drips from your pen here misters! ..even reminds me to lock my windows too..lol..
so I say you rocked the darkness well by this silent night entry.
very detailed write JS.. w/perfect understated events that add up big & wicked at end.
dark curtsies to your eve,
~d
&
"Sleeping enigma,in solitude."
~most favored lines.. power-smacked 'em both.. sez me ;)
The deep eerie chill just drips from your pen here misters! ..even reminds me to lock my windows too..lol..
so I say you rocked the darkness well by this silent night entry.
very detailed write JS.. w/perfect understated events that add up big & wicked at end.
dark curtsies to your eve,
~d
3rd Oct 2015 3:46am
3rd Oct 2015 8:39pm
Indeed--dark....disturbing.....taking the theme of a nite-stalker directly into the realm of the supernatural.!
Mo chara...this reads as a haunting by a tormented spirit.....but not one of tender love tragically taken too soon......but rather, an obsession unfulfilled, and now this ill-fated entity feels compelled to complete the 'unfinished business'........
Admittedly--this piece had me glancing over my shoulder--more than once--even though i read it in full light of day!! Your vivid imagery paints the very plausible picture of reality!!
(...And if reading after darkness has settled, this is one demanding that lamps be turned on!!)
Decidedly Scribed with Shivers in Mind!!
Mo chara...this reads as a haunting by a tormented spirit.....but not one of tender love tragically taken too soon......but rather, an obsession unfulfilled, and now this ill-fated entity feels compelled to complete the 'unfinished business'........
Admittedly--this piece had me glancing over my shoulder--more than once--even though i read it in full light of day!! Your vivid imagery paints the very plausible picture of reality!!
(...And if reading after darkness has settled, this is one demanding that lamps be turned on!!)
Decidedly Scribed with Shivers in Mind!!
4th Oct 2015 7:04am
