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Labyrinth
I'm caught in a maze
of lust, passion and desire
poison ivy thickets
full of lethal spikes
piercing my flesh with ideas
like you're not pretty enough
blocked pathways with
thoughts that draw blood
like you're not a good enough writer
you should cast yourself
in the fire that burns in the center of this labyrinth
let your passion consume you going un-sated
I'm wearing armor for this mind fuck
puzzling passages that lead no where
taking charge I strip naked
throw myself into the poisonous spikes
let the blood run free like a savage
letting out a battle cry
I make my own way through
this mind trip of sexual lust and desire
passion still burning bright
the poison has me infected
slipping in and out of delirium
I'm out but not bloody free
finally my third eye eases open
realizing the mind fucker is me
Published 29th Sep 2015
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29th Sep 2015 5:31pm
29th Sep 2015 6:01pm
29th Sep 2015 5:34pm
29th Sep 2015 6:02pm
Brenda, this is so powerful.. and brilliantly done.. really dig the imagery.. with love..
P.S. love the ending better with the change.. Great ink..
Dave
P.S. love the ending better with the change.. Great ink..
Dave
29th Sep 2015 6:03pm
29th Sep 2015 6:39pm
Can I bitch slap that voice that says you're not a good enough writer? Cause that's what that voice deserves. A good bitch-slappin'.
<3
<3
29th Sep 2015 7:24pm
Harlie I just may need you to do that ;)
thank you lovely one..
with love Crim
thank you lovely one..
with love Crim
29th Sep 2015 7:06pm
29th Sep 2015 7:25pm
Kavik I'm glad you ink it out instead of cutting now..
thank you for visiting my page..
love Brenda
thank you for visiting my page..
love Brenda
29th Sep 2015 10:19pm
30th Sep 2015 2:31am
30th Sep 2015 2:54am
ohhhh....so full of self-torture brenda...a lust for it...and your glourious end!
30th Sep 2015 5:47am
30th Sep 2015 2:54am
That's quite a wise ending. It's all too easy to sabotage oneself with "negative self-talk" doing damage creatively and emotionally. I hope you achieve that freedom you mention in the next-to-last stanza. You seem pretty uninhibited to me. Brilliant job Crim!
30th Sep 2015 5:48am
thank you Sir Crow for an insightful comment yes I saw my way out :)
love Crim
love Crim
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30th Sep 2015 8:36pm
giggling thank you for the pleasurable spankins ;)
also for such lovely comments..
I love you..
xoxoxo Brenda
also for such lovely comments..
I love you..
xoxoxo Brenda
30th Sep 2015 10:14pm
Brenda, what powerful imaginary used to convey the internal struggles>the self-doubts; the questioning of
oneself. I can assure you that you are definitely a talented writer; the way you convey thoughts and emotions
through your words>I would have to believe definitely pretty enough too. Definitely a beautiful and interesting mind.
Keith
oneself. I can assure you that you are definitely a talented writer; the way you convey thoughts and emotions
through your words>I would have to believe definitely pretty enough too. Definitely a beautiful and interesting mind.
Keith
1st Oct 2015 8:21pm
2nd Oct 2015 00:31am
brilliantly encapsulates the battle for self - strong and raw imagery - thought provoking but most of all real. I find it quite ironic that a writer such as yourself has that mental battle with 'Am I a good enough writer'. Clearly you are an exceptional writer, a true wordsmith. It is good that you question this in your own minds eye, humility is a required attribute of only the best of writers. As an avid fan of your work I know just how good you really are :-)
excellent ink :-)
excellent ink :-)
2nd Oct 2015 3:30pm
3rd Oct 2015 3:52pm
This was a nice personal piece, Crim. You expose yourself bravely and have come to a realization in the end. I have found, when entering the labyrinth of the mind, always bring a lantern. There are monsters along the way, but when you shine a light on them, you will find they are cute little critters who just needs a hug and a friend. I enjoyed this poem.
4th Oct 2015 7:49am
