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Her
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KAzV2PxbzvA
shape of my heart please listen while you read, ty.
She must tell her story:
-------
Upside down she is presented into a world
of poverty and hate, left home at a tender age with no direction in place.
She quickly became head and shoulders above the class, the usual suspect
an obvious outcast
She broke many rules to get ahead
only to be beaten by the hands
of a lawless government
She grew into a woman
then married a maniac
bore two of his children
who learned how to hate her
how pathetic is that?!
She writes with the fragrance
of bitterness & regret with a
dash of convoluted tenderness
If she could she would
turn back the hands of time
prepare herself for war
rather than silence,
avoiding the shame and pain
of domestic violence....
Watching as the night sky
fills with stars, somehow
she finds some solace
among her scars.
shape of my heart please listen while you read, ty.
She must tell her story:
-------
Upside down she is presented into a world
of poverty and hate, left home at a tender age with no direction in place.
She quickly became head and shoulders above the class, the usual suspect
an obvious outcast
She broke many rules to get ahead
only to be beaten by the hands
of a lawless government
She grew into a woman
then married a maniac
bore two of his children
who learned how to hate her
how pathetic is that?!
She writes with the fragrance
of bitterness & regret with a
dash of convoluted tenderness
If she could she would
turn back the hands of time
prepare herself for war
rather than silence,
avoiding the shame and pain
of domestic violence....
Watching as the night sky
fills with stars, somehow
she finds some solace
among her scars.
Written by
Zazzles
(Broomie)
Published 29th Sep 2015
| Edited 26th Jan 2023
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Re. Her
29th Sep 2015 1:20pm
a masterfully written poem born of real pain hugs beautiful on this write..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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29th Sep 2015 9:18pm
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Re: Re. Her
29th Sep 2015 9:20pm
Maybe one day Taryn...
Thanks for your love and support sis <3
Loves you willow oxoxoxox
Jackie
Thanks for your love and support sis <3
Loves you willow oxoxoxox
Jackie
Re. Her
29th Sep 2015 4:54pm
A fine portrait of a strong woman.
"She writes with the fragrance of bitterness" and
"Watching the sun go down
the night sky fills with stars,
somehow she found some solace
among the scars. "
Those are my favorite lines but it's all excellent. And I like the optimism at the end.
"die a happy women
with love in her heart..."
I just hope she lives happily too. Fine write Jackie!
"
"She writes with the fragrance of bitterness" and
"Watching the sun go down
the night sky fills with stars,
somehow she found some solace
among the scars. "
Those are my favorite lines but it's all excellent. And I like the optimism at the end.
"die a happy women
with love in her heart..."
I just hope she lives happily too. Fine write Jackie!
"
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Re: Re. Her
29th Sep 2015 9:22pm
Crow,
You are always a positive force in my poetic world... Thank you .
Jackie xoxoxo
You are always a positive force in my poetic world... Thank you .
Jackie xoxoxo
Re. Her
29th Sep 2015 4:55pm
Ms. Z. this is a brilliant write.. so heartfelt, and gut wrenching.. most of all a very powerful ink.. with love, and respect..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. Her
29th Sep 2015 9:55pm
Hey Dave,
Yeah I just had to let it out...
Thank you so much for your faithful support in my writing..
love
Zazzles xoxoxo
Yeah I just had to let it out...
Thank you so much for your faithful support in my writing..
love
Zazzles xoxoxo
Re. Her
29th Sep 2015 5:32pm
A deeply stirring wish that flows beautifully, Zazzles. One that will come true if you keep believing in you.
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Re: Re. Her
29th Sep 2015 9:56pm
Most of the time i just don't think so...
Thanks for the visit always a pleasure to see you Ahavati
((((((((((((((Ahavati)))))))))))))))
love
Zazzles xoxoxox
Thanks for the visit always a pleasure to see you Ahavati
((((((((((((((Ahavati)))))))))))))))
love
Zazzles xoxoxox
Re. Her
30th Sep 2015 2:07am
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30th Sep 2015 6:47pm
Not sure about Thug, but he sure was insane!
loves you Johnny Rotten
Jackie xoxoxoxox
loves you Johnny Rotten
Jackie xoxoxoxox
Re. Her
30th Sep 2015 11:02am
Squeakin' happy to see you, m'lovely sis.. in dark or bright times..
"She writes with the fragrance of bitterness <~~ fave
regret and tainted tenderness...."
~you tug hard at my heart-strings w/your lines luv..
*impressive always, when you pour so purdy tho, y'know?
"Watching the sun go down
the night sky fills with stars,
somehow she found some solace <~~luv!
among the scars. "
~even your owies have beautiful hues darlin..
wishin 'happy' to maul you soon, Jackie-doll.. loves you..w/hughugs & mwahs!!
~ever your seester T
"She writes with the fragrance of bitterness <~~ fave
regret and tainted tenderness...."
~you tug hard at my heart-strings w/your lines luv..
*impressive always, when you pour so purdy tho, y'know?
"Watching the sun go down
the night sky fills with stars,
somehow she found some solace <~~luv!
among the scars. "
~even your owies have beautiful hues darlin..
wishin 'happy' to maul you soon, Jackie-doll.. loves you..w/hughugs & mwahs!!
~ever your seester T
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I truly adore you darkness! you witchy witchy woman..
U always bring happy to my page dear heart...
((((((((((((((((((Tanya)))))))))))))))))))
love always
Jackie xoxoxoxo xoxox
U always bring happy to my page dear heart...
((((((((((((((((((Tanya)))))))))))))))))))
love always
Jackie xoxoxoxo xoxox
Re. Her
7th Oct 2015 7:23am
Wow nice ink zazzles. Your ability to openly share your personal experience is so brave of you. I hope you do find peace as it is one of the most elusive thing to find in this life.
Thanks for sharing
Thanks for sharing
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Re: Re. Her
7th Oct 2015 10:06pm
Me too Devil.
Thanks for your continued support in my writting xoxo
(((((((((Devil))))))))))))
Zazzles
Thanks for your continued support in my writting xoxo
(((((((((Devil))))))))))))
Zazzles
Re. Her
24th Mar 2016 2:35am
you deserve that & so much more....now i understand the significance of the stars to you :)
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Re. Her
Anonymous
14th Jul 2017 4:50pm
Aww, zazzy honey, you have me in a cahoots today, these are exactly my
shared sentiments.
i love you too, my heart is all over the place because if a woman cannot find
her place in life..WE ..feel lost and scathed which is inscribable and unforgiving
almost. There are subjects within ourselves that we just don't understand when
one bad thing combines into another. It's hurtful, so painful and leaves us raw
yet merely shy to the world..especially when all we can do is TRY, over and over
but with no success.
i had to breathe it out
shared sentiments.
i love you too, my heart is all over the place because if a woman cannot find
her place in life..WE ..feel lost and scathed which is inscribable and unforgiving
almost. There are subjects within ourselves that we just don't understand when
one bad thing combines into another. It's hurtful, so painful and leaves us raw
yet merely shy to the world..especially when all we can do is TRY, over and over
but with no success.
i had to breathe it out
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Re. Her
5th Oct 2017 3:12am
Fact truly is stranger than fiction but equally
Surreal... I love you ❤️
Zazzles
Surreal... I love you ❤️
Zazzles
Re. Her
15th Sep 2018 4:25am
"Watching the sun go down
the night sky fills with stars
somehow she found some solace
among the scars."
"She writes with the fragrance of bitterness
regret and convoluted tenderness...."
such splendidness in wordsmithin'
sweet sadness
Jeff
the night sky fills with stars
somehow she found some solace
among the scars."
"She writes with the fragrance of bitterness
regret and convoluted tenderness...."
such splendidness in wordsmithin'
sweet sadness
Jeff
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Re: Re. Her
15th Sep 2018 11:57pm
Why thank you sweet dear Jeff
I’m happy you felt something in this ..
Thoughtfully
Jackie xx
I’m happy you felt something in this ..
Thoughtfully
Jackie xx
Anonymous
- Edited 9th Apr 2022 5:45am
1st Feb 2021 7:16pm
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Re: Re. Her
1st Feb 2021 7:37pm
Yeah it helps to write it out. Thanks for coming by and having a read it as it was a rough time in my life that’s for sure but that’s long since over so no worries thank you my friend
Always your sister in ink James
Jackie xo🤗
Always your sister in ink James
Jackie xo🤗