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Full Womb - Crescent Moon
It might have been the fire from the harp of Lyra
That shone its grace upon the aura of young Ava
Filling the space within as Sol rose toward high noon
Calling to her parent and coming none too soon
In the starry sky the crescent moon is days from full
Still the rising child inside could not resist its pull
The mothers womb is full and ready for a fight
The falcate moon faced Leo and the lion took a bite
Perhaps the hungry babe came out to see the site
Or preferred the warmth within until the morning light
That shone its grace upon the aura of young Ava
Filling the space within as Sol rose toward high noon
Calling to her parent and coming none too soon
In the starry sky the crescent moon is days from full
Still the rising child inside could not resist its pull
The mothers womb is full and ready for a fight
The falcate moon faced Leo and the lion took a bite
Perhaps the hungry babe came out to see the site
Or preferred the warmth within until the morning light
Published 17th Sep 2015
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17th Sep 2015 10:05am
"Filling the space within as Sol rose toward high noon
Calling to her parent and coming none too soon" ..strong image
&
"The falcate moon faced Leo and the lion took a bite".. perfect!
You paint a personified world of spirited images cross the voids w/this..
Lyra & Ava being partial in my heart, old constellations- so you hooked me at gate..
beautiful works done in a balmed mix of JJ & Grecian humors ..or wazzat grecian giggle?!
always enjoy your deeper tween the lines grasp and define. and now the crescent, lovely..
hugs n aww
~d/T
Calling to her parent and coming none too soon" ..strong image
&
"The falcate moon faced Leo and the lion took a bite".. perfect!
You paint a personified world of spirited images cross the voids w/this..
Lyra & Ava being partial in my heart, old constellations- so you hooked me at gate..
beautiful works done in a balmed mix of JJ & Grecian humors ..or wazzat grecian giggle?!
always enjoy your deeper tween the lines grasp and define. and now the crescent, lovely..
hugs n aww
~d/T
17th Sep 2015 11:15am
Thank you for the wonderful comment d/T. There are multiple meanings hidden within the metaphors that I will leave a mystery, but I am glad you enjoyed it from the Heavenly perspective I painted in the sky... jj
17th Sep 2015 6:02pm
...judging from your comment ^^^^above, I sure do wanna' know the hidden meanings inside this beautiful, well written, and intriguing piece. You can whisper it to me, I won't tell a soul. :)
I love this stanza: --> " In the starry sky the crescent moon is days from full
Still the rising child inside could not resist its pull"
Xo
I love this stanza: --> " In the starry sky the crescent moon is days from full
Still the rising child inside could not resist its pull"
Xo
17th Sep 2015 8:10pm
Oh my dear Rain, the secrets I would whisper in your ear if my lips were close enough to tickle the drums within with a heart pulsing beat... you could blackmail me to do thy bidding, even though I would need no coercion to reveal to you my universe entire...
jj
jj
18th Sep 2015 9:49am
19th Sep 2015 3:50pm
excellent piece, deep and disturbing deliberate ambiguity - really stirred my head :-)
19th Sep 2015 8:31pm
19th Sep 2015 10:43pm
Great write. It has that Greek vibe to it (The falcate moon faced Leo and the lion took a bite )
