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Now she's gone
A sober look at a rented soul now sold
A melody screams like violent violin string
brings a silent stare to the new hand she's holding
A brief moment of disbelief, beholding inner cries
A soul dies, broken, a new soul awoken
tormenting thief lies beneath dying belief
dormant demons rise with relief as I stare
at the fool who stole my former nightmare
A melody screams like violent violin string
brings a silent stare to the new hand she's holding
A brief moment of disbelief, beholding inner cries
A soul dies, broken, a new soul awoken
tormenting thief lies beneath dying belief
dormant demons rise with relief as I stare
at the fool who stole my former nightmare
Published 7th Sep 2015
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7th Sep 2015 7:06am
7th Sep 2015 9:38pm
Woo! Now, I don't like too much rhyme in a poem, but that one's great!!!!!! Kept reading it over and again. Very clever on all counts! Wow! Sounds really great, like it!
Lulu
Lulu
Anonymous
8th Sep 2015 6:51am
"at the fool who stole my former nightmare"
good line, man. I like your style. The rhyming doesn't seem too forced on your poems.
good line, man. I like your style. The rhyming doesn't seem too forced on your poems.
10th Sep 2015 6:30pm
Lovely. I love your sense of rhyme, alliteration and assonance.
Nice twist, too. Isn't it funny how human instinct is to be jealous or upset when we see our exes with someone new? There's a reason we're not with them now, but we forget those reasons momentarily when we see they somehow lived on without us.
Nice twist, too. Isn't it funny how human instinct is to be jealous or upset when we see our exes with someone new? There's a reason we're not with them now, but we forget those reasons momentarily when we see they somehow lived on without us.
