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In Your Way
Tell her,
That you love her
That you crave her smell,
Her soft skin pulled
Taught over her
Unsinkable bones.
Tell her,
Her words melt in your mouth
Or how her mind
Feeds your thoughts
How her sweet sweat
Rolls off your brow
Quenching untapped,
Untouched lust.
Love her,
In your way
Hiding in your dreams.
Layering each one
Underneath itself.
Building an unabridged tower.
Hang your triumph
From it's crumbling turret.
Then...
Know, she will love you,
In her way.
That you love her
That you crave her smell,
Her soft skin pulled
Taught over her
Unsinkable bones.
Tell her,
Her words melt in your mouth
Or how her mind
Feeds your thoughts
How her sweet sweat
Rolls off your brow
Quenching untapped,
Untouched lust.
Love her,
In your way
Hiding in your dreams.
Layering each one
Underneath itself.
Building an unabridged tower.
Hang your triumph
From it's crumbling turret.
Then...
Know, she will love you,
In her way.
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Re. In Your Way
Anonymous
31st Aug 2015 5:26am
Brilliant and Breathtaking. . .Miss LooLoo, I'm enamored by your ink. . .xoxo, Devlin;)
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31st Aug 2015 7:06am
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31st Aug 2015 4:41pm
Thank you for stopping by and commenting Toast. I'm glad you found the beauty in this.
Re. In Your Way
31st Aug 2015 12:21pm
Beautiful! Absolutely beautiful!! A love that most yearn for then when they get it they destroy it..💕Sissy
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Re: Re. In Your Way
31st Aug 2015 4:45pm
So true, Sissy. Too many hide from they're true thoughts and feelings. Sometimes it's just too real, hard to handle. Thanks and loves.
Re. In Your Way
31st Aug 2015 6:22pm
Loo, this piece contains hard truths. It makes me think of flattering and loving comments exchanged in a cyber-romance that may indeed be sincere but often not fulfilled in the real world. Does that seem harsh of me? You've made me ponder such things and that I think is the true beauty of poetry that causes one to apply the words to their own life's experience. Brava Loo!
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1st Sep 2015 00:34am
Thank you GW!
You are absolutely right in your observations on cyber romance. Not being harsh at all. My poem isn't necessarily about that, but the same feelings can apply. Definitely. Big love to you!
You are absolutely right in your observations on cyber romance. Not being harsh at all. My poem isn't necessarily about that, but the same feelings can apply. Definitely. Big love to you!
Re. In Your Way
31st Aug 2015 6:54pm
Thanks for the advice, Lookie. Can I quote you? My own feeble words get in my way, and I typically fall flat on my face. This is truly eloquent. This is probably what you'd like to hear from a romantic prospect. I just hope you find someone who even comes close to your way with words. And I agree with Gahdess above. Cyber-romances can be misleading, if not deceptive. Just have to be careful I guess!
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1st Sep 2015 00:26am
Of course you can quote me. Big compliment Mr.C!
Thank you for the great comments. We never really know who we can reach. Loves.
Thank you for the great comments. We never really know who we can reach. Loves.
Re. In Your Way
1st Sep 2015 8:45am
Lookie I really loved this poem.
There are so many loving lines,
So many that beg the lover to
just appreciate the object of
his admiration just as she is
(Acceptance ) let her know how
you feel and be ready to accept
the outcome.
Fav line
Hiding in your dreams.
Layering each one
Underneath itself.
Keith
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Re: Re. In Your Way
1st Sep 2015 5:01pm
Wow, thank you Keith. Great comment. Something I'm learning is the need for transparency. Honesty. Trust. It's funny sometimes how it can only come out in prose though. My inside voice, lol. Cheers.
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2nd Sep 2015 7:02am
I like being called 'little', teehee. So glad you found it enjoyable. Big love to you Taryn.
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