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Flushing Out Prey
Blackened sky fog boasts vanilla hued wind,
hawk a'lights- perching night on thorn-laced bend.
Hunter preys eerie, crooning fierce "crewt~creww.."
grey taloned branch sways.. scenting bandicoot.
Meek as death rose.. 'neath stark moss-laden stones,
hungry life-kissed wishes ..shiny moon blown.
Frenzied earth sighs, beyond its smolder of strife,
hawk swoops, silent beauty, claws piercing furred cry..
All drawing breath, shall some moment die[trying].
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Re. Flushing Out Prey
Anonymous
28th Aug 2015 7:26am
Miss DarkSighs, this is beautiful. . .dark AND beautiful w/a hint of tragedy. . .my kind of happiness. . .Enjoyed!. . .xoxo, Devlin;)
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Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
28th Aug 2015 4:53pm
So much thanx sweet LadyDevlin.. we are much same on happiness factor[yes-yes].. lmsao*
You are the shiny dark grace of my page darlins, tyty!
caffeined curtsy & huggins ;)
~d
You are the shiny dark grace of my page darlins, tyty!
caffeined curtsy & huggins ;)
~d
Re. Flushing Out Prey
28th Aug 2015 9:12am
Poor little bandicoot swooped up ☝
Furry little fought and yelped (what sound would one make)
But it is life.
For a bandicoot.
Crewt crew!!!
Victory cry! Full on sky!
Life for hawk.
The smell of vanilla brings thirst.
A true original D
Always and 💋
J
Furry little fought and yelped (what sound would one make)
But it is life.
For a bandicoot.
Crewt crew!!!
Victory cry! Full on sky!
Life for hawk.
The smell of vanilla brings thirst.
A true original D
Always and 💋
J
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Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
28th Aug 2015 5:01pm
omfg.. you are too much adorable.. they DO make such an awful hi-squeak!
*witnessed in cringed fascination. eg
..but we gotsa feed the darkness & soo much beauty there..;) [know u know too]
luvs that you picked up on the vanilla.. insightful you. Can't even say where in hells
this one came from but?.. cunty muses do prevail. lol
extreme luvstuffs darlin Jen of my heart,
~d
*witnessed in cringed fascination. eg
..but we gotsa feed the darkness & soo much beauty there..;) [know u know too]
luvs that you picked up on the vanilla.. insightful you. Can't even say where in hells
this one came from but?.. cunty muses do prevail. lol
extreme luvstuffs darlin Jen of my heart,
~d
Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
28th Aug 2015 8:24pm
Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
29th Aug 2015 7:51pm
freaggin dittos[extremely] Jen.. funny lil darlin that I luvs!
*giggle fits
~d
*giggle fits
~d
Re. Flushing Out Prey
28th Aug 2015 2:40pm
lovely d~ this is so masterfully written..
pure excellence it made me happy for some reason ;)
thank you with love Crim
pure excellence it made me happy for some reason ;)
thank you with love Crim
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Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
28th Aug 2015 5:04pm
Shits n giggles CrimCrims.. glad you & Devlin feel the happy luster of hunter here wif me..
pourin the luvs sweetie, ty fer takin time.. we smile together in the dark ;)
mwahs
~d
pourin the luvs sweetie, ty fer takin time.. we smile together in the dark ;)
mwahs
~d
Re. Flushing Out Prey
28th Aug 2015 2:59pm
The food circle is cruel but a necessity. Poor poor bandicoot(I really don't know what that is. Lol) you did a great job on this one!
💕Sissy
💕Sissy
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Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
28th Aug 2015 5:09pm
Sissy of fine pen, you are amazin fer the read.. these lil furries look almost like a
sexy[imo] Rat but longer not-so-sexy nose. lol. prey I say & dittos on that circle of life!
much appreciation & thankins m'dear ;)
~d
sexy[imo] Rat but longer not-so-sexy nose. lol. prey I say & dittos on that circle of life!
much appreciation & thankins m'dear ;)
~d
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28th Aug 2015 5:37pm
Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
29th Aug 2015 7:49pm
instant bond there.. they are squishable in extreme.. but stilll irked by the long snout. rofl's
great wknd hours to you Sissy!
~d
great wknd hours to you Sissy!
~d
Re. Flushing Out Prey
28th Aug 2015 3:06pm
Damn...I felt so sad for that lil guy... :(... Still, as a whole this piece was truly amazing! :)
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Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
28th Aug 2015 5:17pm
Amazings right back atcha dearest.. I was of obvious moods of ire here. lol n eeks...
but-but...*did add that uplifting "Trying" at end to be sweet y'know.. eg
thankins fer the visit & hugs on ur day ;)
~d
but-but...*did add that uplifting "Trying" at end to be sweet y'know.. eg
thankins fer the visit & hugs on ur day ;)
~d
Re. Flushing Out Prey
"Meek as the death rose... 'neath the stark moss laden-stones,
hungry life kissed ...shiny moon blown"
One of the finest lines I've read. The imagery is wonderful. Lovely read!
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Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
29th Aug 2015 7:39pm
Hello's to you dear poet.. so happy to see you pop in, always with smiles too.
many thanx fer your time hun.. support duly noted wif hugs, ty!
may your finger picking [or pic] reign sweet this wknd ;)
~d
many thanx fer your time hun.. support duly noted wif hugs, ty!
may your finger picking [or pic] reign sweet this wknd ;)
~d
Re. Flushing Out Prey
29th Aug 2015 7:08pm
"Hawk swoops, silent beauty." It's startling (particularly for the prey) how lovely and filled with grace a predator can be. I've noticed that with a few femme fatales. This is extremely well written with a nice rhythm and rhyme to it. Your word choice is lightly archaic, as befits the fantasy element, methinks. Fine work, take it from a crow who bears witness...
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Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
29th Aug 2015 7:46pm
From the mouth of my fav Crow.. I take it as gospel.. promise ;)
now.. to decide if I'm the hunter or prey this life, it changes every day it seems..
Both sides have a beauty their own..idk/rant of my year. lol.
much luvstufs to your wknd m'friend! appreciate your time everly..
~d
now.. to decide if I'm the hunter or prey this life, it changes every day it seems..
Both sides have a beauty their own..idk/rant of my year. lol.
much luvstufs to your wknd m'friend! appreciate your time everly..
~d
Re. Flushing Out Prey
29th Aug 2015 8:44pm
hawk swoops, silent beauty, claws piercing furred cry..
This says it all about life and love. We are not in control, ever. None of us. Poetry.
This says it all about life and love. We are not in control, ever. None of us. Poetry.
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Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
29th Aug 2015 9:43pm
I can assuredly say, you have never misread a thing of mine dear lady.. even given me
insight to my own lines at times.
You are a powerful solace & appreciated my friend..all-ways!
hugs to your weekend hours darlins
~d
insight to my own lines at times.
You are a powerful solace & appreciated my friend..all-ways!
hugs to your weekend hours darlins
~d
Re. Flushing Out Prey
30th Aug 2015 8:58pm
Very dark and primal. It made me feel like I was in the mind of a hunter. Love it
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Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
2nd Sep 2015 9:11pm
I am pleased to take you away to those dark places in my
brainspace, Devilish P that you are.
[dubbed you there.. swack me if I needs try a diff one, kkk?]
*a'grin surely. ;)
you will always have sweet ty's fer taking time on my page..
very best to you m'friend!
~d
brainspace, Devilish P that you are.
[dubbed you there.. swack me if I needs try a diff one, kkk?]
*a'grin surely. ;)
you will always have sweet ty's fer taking time on my page..
very best to you m'friend!
~d
Re. Flushing Out Prey
2nd Sep 2015 8:16pm
Doth quote the Crow. "crewt-creww" There is some excellent imagery here and, of course, the language is smitten in me.
"neath stark moss-laden stones, "
Always afraid to touch them. The feeling and what lurks beneath was enough to keep me from that. Great work Darksighs.
"neath stark moss-laden stones, "
Always afraid to touch them. The feeling and what lurks beneath was enough to keep me from that. Great work Darksighs.
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Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
2nd Sep 2015 9:20pm
Smitten gets you lowest curtsies dear man..
you'd not believe the country landscape I obliviously bare-footed thru as a youngster..
thinking bk.. damn surprised the creepies were nice and..um.. hidden neath those stones! eeks.
ever grateful fer your presence.. and sum dark shine[w/sparkles] to your day!
~d
you'd not believe the country landscape I obliviously bare-footed thru as a youngster..
thinking bk.. damn surprised the creepies were nice and..um.. hidden neath those stones! eeks.
ever grateful fer your presence.. and sum dark shine[w/sparkles] to your day!
~d
Re: Re. Flushing Out Prey
2nd Sep 2015 9:26pm
A curtsy to the point of your knees kissing the moss is just the right height.
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