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Invite the moon
Sigh.......
I have smoked a million cigarettes
waiting for you moon.
Do please cum make them forget.
Hide me deep within your dark .....
My wanting is rank with regret.
you cannot cum too soon!
To sleep perchance to dream?
I do.
But apologies Sir William,
Aye choose a different rub and it soothe me some with my responding scream.
But then arise the proverbial sun
I wither in its shining effects.
There is no defect that can be unseen,
No misdeeds that in it can be undone.
Oh moon why can't you just stay?
Under shade with lover play and play.
Under lover bend shake me and sway.
The moon she hides i am this way.
I have smoked a million cigarettes
waiting for you moon.
Do please cum make them forget.
Hide me deep within your dark .....
My wanting is rank with regret.
you cannot cum too soon!
To sleep perchance to dream?
I do.
But apologies Sir William,
Aye choose a different rub and it soothe me some with my responding scream.
But then arise the proverbial sun
I wither in its shining effects.
There is no defect that can be unseen,
No misdeeds that in it can be undone.
Oh moon why can't you just stay?
Under shade with lover play and play.
Under lover bend shake me and sway.
The moon she hides i am this way.
Written by
calamitygin
(Jennifer Michael McCurry)
Published 28th Aug 2015
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Re. Invite the moon
28th Aug 2015 7:20am
"But then arise the proverbial sun
I wither in its shining effects."
~I too feel thoroughly & unduly exposed in sunshiney hrs.. bleh sez me. favfav ;)
"Under shade with lover play and play.
Under lover bend shake me and sway. "
~if only the moon would stay.. yep- you gotsa poetry *sigh outa me sweet dolls!
Sooo glad you finished this gem, the emotion swell here has me reaching fer a smoke!
mwahs n awwes darlins,
~d
I wither in its shining effects."
~I too feel thoroughly & unduly exposed in sunshiney hrs.. bleh sez me. favfav ;)
"Under shade with lover play and play.
Under lover bend shake me and sway. "
~if only the moon would stay.. yep- you gotsa poetry *sigh outa me sweet dolls!
Sooo glad you finished this gem, the emotion swell here has me reaching fer a smoke!
mwahs n awwes darlins,
~d
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Re: Re. Invite the moon
28th Aug 2015 7:45am
Thanks for sayin i should.
Felt good my friend. To call you that is like eating cotton candy. Just pure enjoyment of something delicious and pretty and rare. You only get it in the best places!
Sweet dreams sweet!
💫Jennifer
Felt good my friend. To call you that is like eating cotton candy. Just pure enjoyment of something delicious and pretty and rare. You only get it in the best places!
Sweet dreams sweet!
💫Jennifer
Re. Invite the moon
Re: Re. Invite the moon
28th Aug 2015 9:14am
Re. Invite the moon
28th Aug 2015 12:48pm
beautiful Jennifer this is a gem of a write one I can relate to..
I too loved these lines..
"But then arise the proverbial sun
I wither in its shining effects.
There is no defect that can be unseen,
No misdeeds that in it can be undone."
and your closing is perfect..
"The moon she hides i am this way"
beautiful write from a gorgeous lady :)
with love Brenda
I too loved these lines..
"But then arise the proverbial sun
I wither in its shining effects.
There is no defect that can be unseen,
No misdeeds that in it can be undone."
and your closing is perfect..
"The moon she hides i am this way"
beautiful write from a gorgeous lady :)
with love Brenda
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Re: Re. Invite the moon
28th Aug 2015 1:34pm
Awe, thank you so! Our lady of sighs encouraged me to finish it. Her write reminded me of a couple lines i had jotted down a while back. Her latest poem inspired it. Its wonderful.
Love and hugs
🌹J
Love and hugs
🌹J
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28th Aug 2015 1:38pm
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Re: Re. Invite the moon
28th Aug 2015 1:44pm
Our Co2 is at critical levels, the highest ever.
Lol wierd f ing remark. Made me laugh. Thanks for stoppin by and readin, hope purty good was worth your time. Lol
Grins
🚬💋J
Lol wierd f ing remark. Made me laugh. Thanks for stoppin by and readin, hope purty good was worth your time. Lol
Grins
🚬💋J
Re. Invite the moon
28th Aug 2015 1:42pm
Such longing that it breaks my heart Jen. Another beautiful piece of writing that mixes sensuality and heartbreak. Gorgeously done!
J
J
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Re: Re. Invite the moon
28th Aug 2015 1:48pm
Thank you doll, but the thought of breakin your heart breaks mine. 💔
You are a dear
🌹Jennifer
You are a dear
🌹Jennifer
Re. Invite the moon
28th Aug 2015 2:53pm
Beautifully written! And to think we have a full moon now and a super full moon on the 29th. 💕Sissy
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28th Aug 2015 4:51pm
Re. Invite the moon
29th Aug 2015 00:16am
The...that distant lover..we will wait for forever. I see the sun shining on your face, but the moon knows your deep soul.
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Re: Re. Invite the moon
29th Aug 2015 00:34am
Yes love . exactly. We hide, but that darned sun gives us away!
Thanks S
🍒J
Thanks S
🍒J
Re. Invite the moon
29th Aug 2015 7:16pm
I really like your contrast between the cool, tolerant presence of the moon and the unforgiving blaze of the sun. You address the moon like a lover, which adds a lot to this. Fine work Jennifer! And I really like the pic of you strumming the guitar. Maybe you can do a visual sometime...
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Re: Re. Invite the moon
29th Aug 2015 10:15pm
Ah thanks Crow, always appreciate your insight.🌙 The picture is old, 🎸i have aged a few years lol but there are reasons 💊it belongs with these words. A visual? I prefer the stage to film. 🎬
🚬🌛Jennifer
🚬🌛Jennifer
Re. Invite the moon
29th Aug 2015 8:42pm
Cigarettes and moonlight conjure no less than a dreamy landscape of yearning wish.
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29th Aug 2015 10:06pm
Re. Invite the moon
31st Aug 2015 3:07am
It would be quite easy to say this reminds me of George Harrison's "Here Comes The Moon", but in my view that song is inferior to the one he wrote about the sun. Obviously lovers tend to place the moon and it's nature ahead of the sun generally---so do lunatics. I wonder if there is a connection?
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http://youtu.be/6SFNW5F8K9Y
Watch
And of course there is a connection. The sun has more power here though.
Re. Invite the moon
31st Aug 2015 4:04am
Little darlin
Its been a long, cold lonely winter
Little darlin
It feels like years since its been here
Here cums the 🌞
Here cums the 🌞
Here cums the 🌞
And its alright......🎸🎸🎸🎸🎸
A favourite JM. Love Harrison.
If you havent seen it. look up Harrison's posthumous induction to the r n r hall of fame. Hes being inducted with prince. Winwood, petty, Georges son Dahni, and Prince do while my guitar gently weeps. Prince goes into another dimension, Petty is stunned, his son is diggin the fuck outta it. Prince finishes his insane solo, drops the guitar and walks off like "that was my bitch" Harrison would have loved it. You MUST check it out.
🌙J
Its been a long, cold lonely winter
Little darlin
It feels like years since its been here
Here cums the 🌞
Here cums the 🌞
Here cums the 🌞
And its alright......🎸🎸🎸🎸🎸
A favourite JM. Love Harrison.
If you havent seen it. look up Harrison's posthumous induction to the r n r hall of fame. Hes being inducted with prince. Winwood, petty, Georges son Dahni, and Prince do while my guitar gently weeps. Prince goes into another dimension, Petty is stunned, his son is diggin the fuck outta it. Prince finishes his insane solo, drops the guitar and walks off like "that was my bitch" Harrison would have loved it. You MUST check it out.
🌙J
Re: Re. Invite the moon
31st Aug 2015 4:52am
Yes I saw the induction ceremony when it was first aired. As far as I am concerned there is Clapton and there is Prince doing the solo. No others need apply. I love Carlos Santana but his version of "While My Guitar Gently Weeps" doesn't do anything for me. The irony of Winwood's part is that you can actually see him in the video of the Concert For George, but only as an audience member. He and George did record together but Billy Preston and McCartney do most of the work on the piano and organ for the show in England.
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31st Aug 2015 5:07am
I thought Winwood was playing during the performance that night, huh. And the other Traveling, hate i forget, Lyne? Awful of me love him that night.
Re: Re. Invite the moon
31st Aug 2015 5:43am
Nope. I have the DVD. Winwood isn't a part of the lineup. Was interesting to see McCartney up there and not play a single tune on bass.
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Re: Re. Invite the moon
31st Aug 2015 5:51am
Yep, just watched it again. Winwood in credits though. Doesnt matter, i just love Princes performance, looks to get physically week and pushed back up, Dahnni grinning at him and strumming Petty who i dig, looking traveling bewildered. Point was, amazing fucking 🎸 Moment. Prince plays that guitar like hes fingering woman. She is satisfied! ☝✌👆👌👇👉☝👈👍💃
Re. Invite the moon
31st Aug 2015 6:33pm
You should have private messaged me, and asked. I absolutely would. You have left several comments, all examples of your work i guess. But no feedback on my work. I am always happy to read and comment. And usually do that for everyone that reads me. But the best way to get read is to make y houghtful comments on as many poems as possible. Leaving your poetry all over someone elses, while not helping them at all. totally self seving. Take it down, message me and ask like an adult. Then i will be happy to.
Re. Invite the moon
1st Sep 2015 9:36pm
Calamity, there is further depth you illustrate here with the waiting on the moon, your light in the night that turns you on, but must leave with the break of dawn. I really enjoyed this!
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Re: Re. Invite the moon
1st Sep 2015 10:05pm
Thanks DP for seeing it. Always dig what you have to say. Have i told you i really like your new pic? I get dumbfucked and forgetfull. Lol
🚬💋J
🚬💋J