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Thorned Chalice
Pure hate untasted fills her cup,
repelling soul to parch love's tongue.
Sour concoction, piss-poured mock,
absinthe green.. laced brimstone raught.
Swash menacing.. circles times three,
sloshing stale hurts without decree.
She drinks solely his beauty deep,
compressing wounds.. to stanch deceit.
Still no appeasing wine's chilled seethe.
Crestfallen.. she epiphanies' ..
"Ruler must first trust fate replete-
only then.. would Thorned King love she."
.. bowing meek peace to royalty.
King offers swilled chalice again,
of liquid hearts in poison blend.
"Lips shall not drink of death unsinned."
~She needn't prove love by suicide.
..drinkless.. yet dead to him this time.
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Re. Thorned Chalice
Anonymous
- Edited 7th Aug 2015 3:54am
7th Aug 2015 3:20am
I think you are an amazing poet, plus being being an amazing person. Thank you,
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7th Aug 2015 4:22am
Thanks ever-so, Jerry, this was a really great book inspire by Diana Gabaldon.. appreciate the read hun!
good eve to you ;)
~d
good eve to you ;)
~d
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7th Aug 2015 5:35am
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7th Aug 2015 5:53am
yes.. YES! ..the same she & has been a fav since that series!(omg.. lotsa yrs. sshh) lol
great minds y'knw? ;)
luckee you.. I *did get autographed books from a friend tho!
~d
great minds y'knw? ;)
luckee you.. I *did get autographed books from a friend tho!
~d
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7th Aug 2015 3:38am
Re: Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 4:26am
Hihi's sweetie! Thanx much fer stepping into my fantasy page.. where royalty dallies! lol
have fun w/this wicked archaic deeds ;) hugs n mwahs..
~d
have fun w/this wicked archaic deeds ;) hugs n mwahs..
~d
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7th Aug 2015 3:39am
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7th Aug 2015 4:32am
kings & princes are the breaks, yes?.. lol
I'd recommend the honest thief any day..;)
great to have you, appreciate it muchly SirJ!
~d
I'd recommend the honest thief any day..;)
great to have you, appreciate it muchly SirJ!
~d
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Always so beautifully written. Great rhymes. Had to read aloud to really appreciate.
Always finding myself having to read several times, I guess I"m either a little
slow or just enjoy the mental stimulation of reading your ink. :) K2m (Keith)
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Re: Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 4:40am
Thank you for the time huns, I am gonna nix sum archaics from my next one.. plain speak.. just to ty for reading.. lol.. the book I'd read was almost guttural Scottish so was hard this time..
have a great night sweet man!
~d
have a great night sweet man!
~d
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- Edited 25th Sep 2020 3:45am
7th Aug 2015 4:25am
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Re: Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 5:11am
Thankies sweet sis.. knew you'd enjoy a .. 'she ain't fallin for it' ..dark romance..
today was the day for grrs & stories ;)
gonna tuck tail & just write a few innocent smutties next.. clear the brain of sinister plot lines.
loves your fire sissy.. hot kisses sweet Taryn of the Faires,
~d
today was the day for grrs & stories ;)
gonna tuck tail & just write a few innocent smutties next.. clear the brain of sinister plot lines.
loves your fire sissy.. hot kisses sweet Taryn of the Faires,
~d
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7th Aug 2015 4:26am
Re: Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 5:18am
A fine pleasure it is to have you dears! you are most awesome to take time..
hope you are raisin hell misters,
curtsies from my pen & I,
~d misters
hope you are raisin hell misters,
curtsies from my pen & I,
~d misters
Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 5:32am
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7th Aug 2015 5:54am
Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 5:41am
Again, I had to read this a few times... to take it in.
Dare I say.... Shakespearean?
(that was an unintentional rhyme...but I will take it!)
You truly have a unique style that is olde, but new. I can totally imagine a Court Jester reciting this in some Castle far away from where I live. So she never did drink it...?
Dare I say.... Shakespearean?
(that was an unintentional rhyme...but I will take it!)
You truly have a unique style that is olde, but new. I can totally imagine a Court Jester reciting this in some Castle far away from where I live. So she never did drink it...?
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Re: Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 5:57am
nope's.. the lil lady kept on truckin'.. maybe a part two..?
w/cuervo & food poisoning? ;) lmsao*
thx ever so m'sweetie.. you are too kind.
~d
w/cuervo & food poisoning? ;) lmsao*
thx ever so m'sweetie.. you are too kind.
~d
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7th Aug 2015 9:42am
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7th Aug 2015 9:42pm
hello's sweet poet, so great to see you here.. tyty ;)
had fantastic inspires here.. aaand learned to mix my Own drinks.. lmsao*
dark shiny ty's for the visit m'dear sir,
~d
had fantastic inspires here.. aaand learned to mix my Own drinks.. lmsao*
dark shiny ty's for the visit m'dear sir,
~d
Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 12:11pm
oooh soul sister, stirring cyanide into cocktails today, ain't ya...
"drinkless.. yet dead to him this time"
^^^^
... i can taste that in the coffee this morning. bitter-sweet indeed
"drinkless.. yet dead to him this time"
^^^^
... i can taste that in the coffee this morning. bitter-sweet indeed
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Re: Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 9:50pm
ooohh yay, 'cyanide cocktails'.. I s'pose we gals must come 'vially' prepared too, yes? I still adore those lil poison/pillbox rings.. silver of course. ;)
I will honestly never tire of your precious words on my page.. sister of devious pens, are we..and I mushily loves you fer takin' time on me! *mauling squeeze*
curtsies of coffee kisses,
~d
I will honestly never tire of your precious words on my page.. sister of devious pens, are we..and I mushily loves you fer takin' time on me! *mauling squeeze*
curtsies of coffee kisses,
~d
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7th Aug 2015 12:33pm
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7th Aug 2015 9:56pm
Kindred hello's to you sweetie, much thanx fer stoppin in, tyty. yeps.. it was a debate at ending, buuut figured I'd leave the martyred love for another poem.. lol in case the muse stubborns up, y'know? ;)
you've brightened my day, hope yours goes in same fashion!
~d
you've brightened my day, hope yours goes in same fashion!
~d
Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 3:54pm
absinthe green.. laced brimstone raught
raught is such a great word. absinthe...um but that it was still legal. :)
Great ink, darksighing one.
raught is such a great word. absinthe...um but that it was still legal. :)
Great ink, darksighing one.
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7th Aug 2015 10:06pm
I am so glad you appreciate the word, it seems too many great ones are getting lost to these new urban dictionaries.. grumbles* cud be the reason they ostracized absinthe.. hmmm.. lol.
you've humble me with your read m'lady.. do believe you were one of the first I read at dup & you hooked me w/your wit!
take care ;)
~d
you've humble me with your read m'lady.. do believe you were one of the first I read at dup & you hooked me w/your wit!
take care ;)
~d
Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 5:13pm
D,
Your pen gives way to wicked, delicious, sophisticated, soul clenching Art. It feels so good to read your work.. Im beyond impressed😊
Your pen gives way to wicked, delicious, sophisticated, soul clenching Art. It feels so good to read your work.. Im beyond impressed😊
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Re: Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 10:19pm
Hihi's sweet lady.. my heart is squeezed by your gorgeous comment, as I quite fancy your pen too!
so, may we keep impressing each other ;) ..been finishing the [too]many writes I've started lately & it is
truly fancy to have you reading.. *mwahs of thanx ;)
great day to you, my dearest friend,
~d
so, may we keep impressing each other ;) ..been finishing the [too]many writes I've started lately & it is
truly fancy to have you reading.. *mwahs of thanx ;)
great day to you, my dearest friend,
~d
Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 5:49pm
i'm dizzy from scrollllllllllllllllllllllllllllllling to get here.
You have too many fans.
I have 3-4 a few........thank you for bein one of'em.
a dis'easy trium'ph, your write
You have too many fans.
I have 3-4 a few........thank you for bein one of'em.
a dis'easy trium'ph, your write
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Re: Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 10:28pm
Aawwes.. giving you hugs fer all the scrolling.. buuut know, I will always be elbowing the front of any line to read you.. cuz I certainly know Spectacular when I read it & you Are.. says me..;)
besides, wudn't be a party without ur sweet self, Sirz o D!! ty so much.
curtsies so fondly huns,
~d
besides, wudn't be a party without ur sweet self, Sirz o D!! ty so much.
curtsies so fondly huns,
~d
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8th Aug 2015 2:50am
Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 6:34pm
beautiful d~ poison, royalty all so wonderfully combined..
making a cocktail of literary genius that makes my head spin..
masterful inking lovely one..
with love Crim
making a cocktail of literary genius that makes my head spin..
masterful inking lovely one..
with love Crim
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Re: Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 10:38pm
LadyCrim, my purdy-purdy poetess! hughugs to have you and for the fuzzies by sweet comment..;)
you give my muse new phrases every time.. makes you amazin, y'know?!
smiles on your day everly darlin,
~d
you give my muse new phrases every time.. makes you amazin, y'know?!
smiles on your day everly darlin,
~d
Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 8:03pm
I'm just glad she didn't succumb to the king. He probably had a taste tester to prevent his own demise. The thorns, dripping cyanide, should be placed in his crown right between the rubies and sapphires, then he could wear it to the grave. Something the Borgias might come up with. Loved this, Darksighs!
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Re: Re. Thorned Chalice
7th Aug 2015 10:48pm
omg..dearest Sir of Crow.. we are *eye to eye* on taste-tester ideal! .. was thinking it'd prolly be 'her' hired body guard or sum such archaic deviltry.. lol
And the Borgias?... wowie, what an infamous family they were! I've read/watched lots on their lives, was almost a daily plot there. Now you have me remembering the matriarch Borgia who made her servant sing while dying(poisoned by food).. an un-knowing taste-taster, I believe.. wicked n loved..;)
thanx much fer the visit, great day to you!
~d
And the Borgias?... wowie, what an infamous family they were! I've read/watched lots on their lives, was almost a daily plot there. Now you have me remembering the matriarch Borgia who made her servant sing while dying(poisoned by food).. an un-knowing taste-taster, I believe.. wicked n loved..;)
thanx much fer the visit, great day to you!
~d
Re. Thorned Chalice
17th Aug 2015 3:51pm
Pure hate untasted fills her cup,
repelling soul to parch love's tongue.
Sour concoction, piss-poured mock,
absinthe green.. laced brimstone raught.
I love it. I secretly hoped she wouldn't drink and was rewarded. Nice ink.
repelling soul to parch love's tongue.
Sour concoction, piss-poured mock,
absinthe green.. laced brimstone raught.
I love it. I secretly hoped she wouldn't drink and was rewarded. Nice ink.
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20th Aug 2015 00:38am
I sweetly thank you for the read.. wows to how behind I am on replies.. so I remedy to my warmest of thx Plus pardon the tardy. Very much appreciate your presence & look forward to reading you soon.
great nights to you! ;)
~d
great nights to you! ;)
~d
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17th Aug 2015 5:57pm
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20th Aug 2015 00:42am
Warm welcomes sweet one..& much thanx for taking time on me! I look forward to reading you & adore the name lady Wandering Willow.. best of nites to you ;)
~d
~d
Re. Thorned Chalice
19th Aug 2015 8:42am
The characters here are great. The reader gets a good view of both. I, of course, warm to your meek yet later strong female. I wonder if he drank from his chalice alone. Lovely write. Great, gothic poet.
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20th Aug 2015 00:49am
You have the most stellar comments to both poetry & form, it means All, to hear your thoughts! Thanx so much for the read. I'm wondering along w/you if he might have gotten sauced & drank himself also.. now that you have my devious pen in ponder. lmsao* ..truly, tyty..
~d
~d
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Anonymous
19th Aug 2015 4:00pm
this here..is the lure of poetry..your presentation is absolutely divine...verbiage so deliberately laced..smooth..yet thick with profound depth..I absolutely love this DS ..an artiste indeed you are!!!
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Re: Re. Thorned Chalice
20th Aug 2015 00:58am
Aww so good to see you dear man! So much thanx.. I'm now taking ideals for the infamous payback to this one. *lil cackles. I adore the depths to which you read into my "verbiage so deliberately laced".. cuz that's just tasty word flavor & quite the humbling thought.
blessings misters & always best wishes to you m'fellow artiste [muchly] ;)
~d
blessings misters & always best wishes to you m'fellow artiste [muchly] ;)
~d