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Me and Chuck
It's no wonder I trust you with my soul
Let you embrace me
Cover me
Shield me
Your coat of arms makes me
Royal
Our misguided adventures are of my design
But you are the perfect partner
Wings to this dragonfly
As I lope over
Carolina's creeks
And swing from the mahogany of her oaks
You're there with me
My cousins say I'm not ready
Boy you're so skinny
you could hoola hoop with a Cheerio
They yell
Ya mama
I yell back
Now gimme the rock
And I shoot like the Pearl
Soaring with your stars beneath me
By evenin'
My uncles let me in their circle
They pass
cigarettes
beer
gas
lies and laughter
Their feet are bound for the burdens they must carry
heavy
muddied
scarred
They call me
Boy
Cause I still carry stars in my eyes
and on my feet
Published 3rd Aug 2015
| Edited 30th Dec 2015
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3rd Aug 2015 4:54pm
Fucking epic! It reads like a novel. Few words that describe a life. Incredibly well written!
You're far too kind! This was inspired by a recent competition "These boots are made for walkin'" hosted by Miss Sub ...
The summer heat of recent days took me back to my incredible days, and nights, on the Carolina coast as a youngster ...
I'm touched you enjoyed it so.
Cheers
Anonymous
3rd Aug 2015 6:40pm
"Boy you're so skinny you could hoola hoop with a cheerio" - I must remember to write that one down 😂
In all seriousness, I really appreciated this, because it's real. You connect to it on some sort of human level. It may just be the adventurer and scavenger in me that likes to think of shoes taking a person on an adventure, who knows.
Really glad this came out of the comp. Some really great entries, but this made my insides shine a little.
Cheers for the time, LSP!
In all seriousness, I really appreciated this, because it's real. You connect to it on some sort of human level. It may just be the adventurer and scavenger in me that likes to think of shoes taking a person on an adventure, who knows.
Really glad this came out of the comp. Some really great entries, but this made my insides shine a little.
Cheers for the time, LSP!
4th Aug 2015 3:45am
Yes my "narra" frame was bait for a lot of my cousins back in the day lol
But writing this piece reminded me of how my glorious those times were ... So I thank you for stirring the pot Miss_Sub
xo
But writing this piece reminded me of how my glorious those times were ... So I thank you for stirring the pot Miss_Sub
xo
4th Aug 2015 5:12am
4th Aug 2015 9:09am
Thanks bro for the comment and RL add ... I used to have a fierce game on the court ... I was skinny but had mad hops, I used to love going up against bigger guys and swatting their shots off the court like they were flies.
4th Aug 2015 6:45pm
awesome ink you created LobodeSanPedro... thank you for sharing the journey through your words
4th Aug 2015 8:42pm
You're welcome ... More importantly - Thank You for taking the time to read and comment
4th Aug 2015 9:26pm
They call me
Boy
Cause I still carry stars in my eyes
and on my feet
Beautiful ending and testament to the wisdom of age in the recognition of youth. Movingly done, as are all your pieces.
Boy
Cause I still carry stars in my eyes
and on my feet
Beautiful ending and testament to the wisdom of age in the recognition of youth. Movingly done, as are all your pieces.
4th Aug 2015 10:00pm
Thank you so much for your kind words; the heat of today made me wish I was in that circle enjoying a bushel of crabs - beer and Jacks before heading in for dinner
5th Aug 2015 7:27am
5th Aug 2015 12:14pm
... And trash talking lol ... Thanks for the comment - always appreciated
13th Aug 2015 10:32am
Beautiful, I was brought here by the Movie Comp but this was just fantastic.
Favourite lines: 'My cousins say I'm not ready
Boy you're so skinny
you could hoola hoop with a Cheerio' They couple together beautifully and flow well. Thank you for this read. It was great.
Favourite lines: 'My cousins say I'm not ready
Boy you're so skinny
you could hoola hoop with a Cheerio' They couple together beautifully and flow well. Thank you for this read. It was great.
13th Aug 2015 3:08pm
Whatever got you here is fine ... I'm just glad you came and took the time to read and comment ...
lol ... Your favorite lines were the center of a lot of teenage angst for me but I survived - it just made me work harder against the big boys
Salud
lol ... Your favorite lines were the center of a lot of teenage angst for me but I survived - it just made me work harder against the big boys
Salud
18th Aug 2015 1:57am
"My uncles let me in their circle
They pass
cigarettes
beer
gas"
Heheheh made me giggle!
"They call me
Boy
Cause I still carry stars in my eyes
and on my feet"
Nice!
They pass
cigarettes
beer
gas"
Heheheh made me giggle!
"They call me
Boy
Cause I still carry stars in my eyes
and on my feet"
Nice!
18th Aug 2015 11:56am
