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all endings
dregs of the gray spirit quiver when they
are getting close those trusty night gods
approaching slow from still emptiness to
deliver me a black fate a slow wading in sick
water. am i entering my endings? laboring under
the whole weight of something. can i bear it? my
dread is chilled to a halt. like a shock like a
burn like a feeling in the heart i am all new.
are getting close those trusty night gods
approaching slow from still emptiness to
deliver me a black fate a slow wading in sick
water. am i entering my endings? laboring under
the whole weight of something. can i bear it? my
dread is chilled to a halt. like a shock like a
burn like a feeling in the heart i am all new.
Published 28th Jul 2015
| Edited 29th Jul 2015
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29th Jul 2015 00:45am
Very modernly constructed but it is unclear where you are going with it. the break areas are somewhat strange when read aloud.
29th Jul 2015 3:12am
29th Jul 2015 5:09am
Of all endings baring the "new".. very poignant word use!
"..deliver me a black fate a slow wading in sick water."
~great visuals penned, like this one most.
warm welcomes, poet ;)
~d
"..deliver me a black fate a slow wading in sick water."
~great visuals penned, like this one most.
warm welcomes, poet ;)
~d
29th Jul 2015 7:15am
