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Truth In Nonsense
butane eyes belie
the truth in your excrement
smeared on the walls of my mind
slithers on the wind
slimy of hand and heart
chemically addicted gnat
acidic angel with wire hair
blood flows from a drunk carpet
absorbing corruption
cigarette smoking a human
exhaling the ashy soul
the tobacco coughs up a turd
the welfare check talks back
children ringing off the hook
go unnoticed playing off key notes
river of stone
flowing nonsense
from it's garaged nose
housing a white woman
virgin whore
whose skin is snow
black of day
kisses the tarmac
ears to an empty computer
talking walls
don't listen to the ramblings
of a guitar string that has snapped
(For Get Weird Comp.)
the truth in your excrement
smeared on the walls of my mind
slithers on the wind
slimy of hand and heart
chemically addicted gnat
acidic angel with wire hair
blood flows from a drunk carpet
absorbing corruption
cigarette smoking a human
exhaling the ashy soul
the tobacco coughs up a turd
the welfare check talks back
children ringing off the hook
go unnoticed playing off key notes
river of stone
flowing nonsense
from it's garaged nose
housing a white woman
virgin whore
whose skin is snow
black of day
kisses the tarmac
ears to an empty computer
talking walls
don't listen to the ramblings
of a guitar string that has snapped
(For Get Weird Comp.)
Published 26th Jul 2015
| Edited 27th Jul 2015
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Anonymous
26th Jul 2015 7:55pm
The cryptic comp! Brenda, this poem has just the right details to weave a mystery with great concise lines. Very well done beautiful lady.
26th Jul 2015 8:10pm
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26th Jul 2015 8:34pm
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26th Jul 2015 8:47pm
26th Jul 2015 10:14pm
saw this in the comp and just fell in love with your abstract. loveeeee love loved this beautiful brenda xoxo
you made my week beautiful Katja.. smiling wide at you.. thank you lovely one for the RL add and heart touching comment.. your entry is so magnificent I love you Brenda :)
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beautiful Taryn you did have me giggling with your comment I could see you actually picturing these words.. I don't know much about Asperger's though I know quite a few of writers have it and from your writing done so brilliantly :) with love Brenda
27th Jul 2015 7:11am
you cook up a wild stew, Crim. I'm takin the virgin whore & hangin out by the stoned river...
27th Jul 2015 3:10pm
27th Jul 2015 11:30am
wow it's like a new genre of poetry - nonsense poetry that is not nonsensical by any means, yet it appears that way - its definately weird and strange, so much so I can't explain why I like it :-)
27th Jul 2015 3:12pm
thank you David for wading through my nonsense and making some sense out of it with love Crim
27th Jul 2015 3:30pm
Sorry, i couldn't really follow, but that imagery... Amazing. The best damn nonsense I have read in a long time. Enjoyed
27th Jul 2015 4:02pm
thank you Colten for wading through my nonsense and leaving a great comment with love Crim :)
27th Jul 2015 5:32pm
I really like you imbue the artifacts of daily life (computer, carpet) with such entertaining weirdness. I hope your walls take the time to listen. Loved this! Good luck with the comp.
27th Jul 2015 5:52pm
28th Jul 2015 2:48pm
Brilliant, Brenda.. just love the choice of words, and your phrasing.. this is a simply dynamite ink.. much love, and respect..
Dave
Dave
28th Jul 2015 4:14pm
28th Jul 2015 3:41pm
Wow! This is the first time I'm reading you and what a gorgeous weave of words you work.....
All the best in the comp ; )
All the best in the comp ; )
28th Jul 2015 4:15pm
thank you Lena for reading me :) and for such a beautiful comment with love Crim
29th Jul 2015 3:33am
Your opening drew me in and.. just 'wow' down your lines! powerful images, m'lady!
The addiction for me, is the word flow & combo used, so effective..
"acidic angel with wire hair
blood flows from a drunk carpet
absorbing corruption"
~very best word-smack I've had all day.. I'm thinkin pasta & beer ;)
"cigarette smoking a human
exhaling the ashy soul "
~truth in your kooky verse, smokers guilt here, totally..lol..enjoyed..
great comp entry.. I am now a fan of your vocab & shall be following you.(no stalk, just follow) ha.
best nites to you LadyC ;)
~d
The addiction for me, is the word flow & combo used, so effective..
"acidic angel with wire hair
blood flows from a drunk carpet
absorbing corruption"
~very best word-smack I've had all day.. I'm thinkin pasta & beer ;)
"cigarette smoking a human
exhaling the ashy soul "
~truth in your kooky verse, smokers guilt here, totally..lol..enjoyed..
great comp entry.. I am now a fan of your vocab & shall be following you.(no stalk, just follow) ha.
best nites to you LadyC ;)
~d
29th Jul 2015 4:00am
lovely d you made my night with your fantastic comments :) no worries on the smoking I'm a smoker too ;) I love your style lady you are unique and fabulous in every way.. with love Crim
