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Waiting
Close embraced
we lay upon the grass
and the soft kiss
kiss,kiss of lips
hid our real complaint.
Too young, not ours to take
must wait for later times
when love admits the body's wish
when trust with fear subdued
admits the need
a need for ourward signs
to proof our inner love
and seal the bleeding
of the yearning heart.
So fondly gazing
touching, tempting, knowing
we rose, left the cosy circle,
dragged our way to home
to wait, wait and wait
we lay upon the grass
and the soft kiss
kiss,kiss of lips
hid our real complaint.
Too young, not ours to take
must wait for later times
when love admits the body's wish
when trust with fear subdued
admits the need
a need for ourward signs
to proof our inner love
and seal the bleeding
of the yearning heart.
So fondly gazing
touching, tempting, knowing
we rose, left the cosy circle,
dragged our way to home
to wait, wait and wait
Published 25th Jul 2015
| Edited 5th Apr 2016
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Anonymous
26th Jul 2015 6:56am
Beautiful tender lines Mr. Kexby with subtle erotic tones.
I appreciate the repetition of some of the words, how it gives insistence to the underlying feelings.
And the line grouped in 3s :)
I have to tell you that the poem you suggested in grouping thoughts in 3s, it took 3 different edits and i can't decide which one i should keep for now it's shelved since each one contains something special that i can't seen to part with.
I appreciate the repetition of some of the words, how it gives insistence to the underlying feelings.
And the line grouped in 3s :)
I have to tell you that the poem you suggested in grouping thoughts in 3s, it took 3 different edits and i can't decide which one i should keep for now it's shelved since each one contains something special that i can't seen to part with.
I have tried to write about the innocense and naivity of young love,the poem is childlike,the erotic love and sex is for the future and hidden in the mist that is the future.I think most of us understand this and recall those early days in our teens and early twenties which can return in later years.I write as I feel rarely planning the writing simply drawing on my past experience and to hell with convention !
Thankyou for your interest
Don't leave the poetry on the shelf too long ! let it ripen awhile then consume
Thankyou for your interest
Don't leave the poetry on the shelf too long ! let it ripen awhile then consume
