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long gone lovers
whiskey in the bottle, bottle on the shelf
set a simple table, visiting myself
red silk tie, navy jacket, classy gray fedora
take a midnight stroll thru Sodom & Gomorrah
lightning brands the starless sky & thunder roars
dancehalls full of blues & dire, mascara’d whores
the siren sighs of fallen angels on the make
gold will tarnish easy, & hearts were meant to break
I’m dancing slow with a doll who’s sepia-haired & lonely
shuffle & swaying, just to hold her close to me
love burns like autumn leaves & dreams must turn to stone
my name is John, & I was born to be alone
a hundred moons have risen in the distant skies
& still I see her face & hear her plaintive cries
ghostly hands embrace me, restless in the covers
the mournful eyes & dreaded kiss of long gone lovers…
Published 24th Jul 2015
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24th Jul 2015 00:41am
24th Jul 2015 1:12am
"a hundred moons have risen in the distant skies
& still I see her face & hear her plaintive cries"
~all reads woeful and dainty down your page, but *this, especially paints beauty of haunting remembrance.
take care SirJ.. enjoyed w/shiny eyes.. ;)
~d
& still I see her face & hear her plaintive cries"
~all reads woeful and dainty down your page, but *this, especially paints beauty of haunting remembrance.
take care SirJ.. enjoyed w/shiny eyes.. ;)
~d
24th Jul 2015 3:14am
24th Jul 2015 12:39pm
Wow John, this was awesome!
Love the rhyme. It had me humming the song "The Devil Went Down to Georgia"....lol .....I like to dance to that song ; )
Love the rhyme. It had me humming the song "The Devil Went Down to Georgia"....lol .....I like to dance to that song ; )
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25th Jul 2015 3:22am
Ahh beautifully breathtaking angst...this was wonderful start to finish..I enjoyed immensely!!!
25th Jul 2015 3:57am
A hauntingly beautiful write JohnFeddeler... each stanza could easily stand alone...you strung them together so smoothly, delicately, but each has its own deliberate punch ... You can feel the ache, and the last stanza punctuates that feeling...
25th Jul 2015 10:52pm
Beautifully worded and rhymed. "Born to be alone." I imagine your work prevents this to some extent.
26th Jul 2015 00:02am
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30th Jul 2015 4:59am
John as usual you've writen a heart gripping piece.......although sad I enjoyed this very much.......feeling your emotions thru this......very vice in imagery......xo :)
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10th Aug 2015 9:50pm
The melancholy is lush! Your poetry always strikes deep. Respectfully, blue angel
17th Aug 2015 3:26pm
