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Musing about a Sadistic Critiquer
When I first started inking out my thoughts here
you were ruthless with your critiques of my writes
my thoughts were fuck you
then I started to see you knew what you were talking about
being a writer and man of the highest caliber
I miss the those days now
I long for the days of verbal beatings
tongue lashings that now leave me creaming inside
the masochist in me loving the pain
you would leave me rolling with your hilarious
honest take downs of fellow poets who didn't meet the cut
what happened?
are we now beneath your contempt?
or is it sobriety
that has stayed your fists
from swinging and leaving a devastating blow
upon some unsuspecting poets page
let your anger and intelligence loose
I used to be mushy
you hate that wanting raw truth from me
still wanting your approval
craving a fist fucking
brutal assault
taking me down as a poet
you know I delete my most honest writes
I wonder if it pisses you off
or if I'm below pissing on
give me a golden shower of drunken hate
for my inept attempts at this thing we call art
you were ruthless with your critiques of my writes
my thoughts were fuck you
then I started to see you knew what you were talking about
being a writer and man of the highest caliber
I miss the those days now
I long for the days of verbal beatings
tongue lashings that now leave me creaming inside
the masochist in me loving the pain
you would leave me rolling with your hilarious
honest take downs of fellow poets who didn't meet the cut
what happened?
are we now beneath your contempt?
or is it sobriety
that has stayed your fists
from swinging and leaving a devastating blow
upon some unsuspecting poets page
let your anger and intelligence loose
I used to be mushy
you hate that wanting raw truth from me
still wanting your approval
craving a fist fucking
brutal assault
taking me down as a poet
you know I delete my most honest writes
I wonder if it pisses you off
or if I'm below pissing on
give me a golden shower of drunken hate
for my inept attempts at this thing we call art
Published 20th Jul 2015
| Edited 18th Oct 2016
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Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
20th Jul 2015 9:20pm
I take it you prefer "honest critique" Crim. Okay! Excellent work! A little rough around the edges, maybe, but your request for brutal honesty and a fist fucking pack a punch. I hope this poet regains his ferocity. You deserve it, baby.
20th Jul 2015 9:25pm
thank you Sir Crow I do too.. I so enjoyed it.. was part of the fun of this place and thank you for your honesty with love Crim
20th Jul 2015 9:32pm
Damn, Brenda.. This is powerful, and packed with venom.. Just letting the emotions fill the page, and throwing caution to the wind.. I love the brutal honesty of this write.. well done.. into my list it goes.. much love, and respect...
Dave
Dave
20th Jul 2015 9:38pm
thank you Dave for getting this write and the add made my day :) with love Brenda
20th Jul 2015 10:28pm
21st Jul 2015 8:08pm
thank you beautiful Tommie for taking this to your list and gracious comment with love Crim
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21st Jul 2015 8:09pm
20th Jul 2015 11:03pm
I recall many writings from you Crim, relating to this Master of Ink u write about today...
How he makes u feel, on so many levels... U never disappoint us* with your raw and lethal dose of "angst in sorrow"
I thought this was Excellent Brenda thanks for sharing ")
love
Zazzles xoxoxox
How he makes u feel, on so many levels... U never disappoint us* with your raw and lethal dose of "angst in sorrow"
I thought this was Excellent Brenda thanks for sharing ")
love
Zazzles xoxoxox
21st Jul 2015 8:11pm
21st Jul 2015 8:10am
raw truth served up in a hearty way, Crim. it's good to hear from those who know the craft...
21st Jul 2015 8:12pm
22nd Jul 2015 1:00am
wow such animalistic brutality yet beautifully written - you really are such a master of original poetry
Love it :-)
Love it :-)
22nd Jul 2015 3:37pm
Anonymous
2nd Aug 2015 5:26pm
Brenda, I just saw this under misc. poems (my favorite new category to explore lately) and its awesome. I totally agree with you, when we get to that point where our skin wears another layer of shield, its addictive craving a good conversation of critiques and discussions. As you elegantly put it 'euphoric heights'.
5th Aug 2015 6:22pm
thank you lovely Rina yes it does cause pleasure to get a verbal beating if our poems are sub par.. thank you again with love Brenda
10th Sep 2018 3:51pm
10th Sep 2018 6:31pm
thank you dearest Augustomni yeah I really respect this poet's honesty 🌹
love Crimsin
love Crimsin
1st Feb 2019 3:34pm
A powerful piece. I can feel your anguish.
Don;'t let people like that bother you. Just write your beautiful poetry and giggle when then comment. Who cares what they really think.
xo
Don;'t let people like that bother you. Just write your beautiful poetry and giggle when then comment. Who cares what they really think.
xo
1st Feb 2019 3:37pm
this poet was so hard on me when I first started here nowadays he says nothing I kind of miss his verbal beatings I'm a masochist...
thank you for the beautiful advice...
love Brenda 🌹
thank you for the beautiful advice...
love Brenda 🌹
2nd Mar 2019 5:44am
2nd Mar 2019 12:25pm
17th Apr 2023 4:19pm
A very honest write about how the critiquer perceived you. Your feelings are art in themselves. Jagged edged nostalgia!
17th Apr 2023 4:46pm
