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Sunday Service
Living like a stoic priest
Rarely coming near the feast
Still doing what it is he must
To follow the dictates of lust
So beckoning Enigma Rose
To bear witness as his passion grows
Perhaps take the matter well in hand
And stroke it when it takes a stand
She's enough to make a stoic cry
"Revelation!" as she sucks him dry
Delighted to have played some part
In freeing his sequestered heart.
Rarely coming near the feast
Still doing what it is he must
To follow the dictates of lust
So beckoning Enigma Rose
To bear witness as his passion grows
Perhaps take the matter well in hand
And stroke it when it takes a stand
She's enough to make a stoic cry
"Revelation!" as she sucks him dry
Delighted to have played some part
In freeing his sequestered heart.
Published 20th Jul 2015
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20th Jul 2015 7:27pm
20th Jul 2015 7:36pm
Thank you Lookie. I often wonder if I'm forcing rhythm and rhyme. Sometimes it's effective and in service to the content. Other times it can be an annoying gimmick. Maybe it worked for this one. Happy to be of service!
20th Jul 2015 7:33pm
20th Jul 2015 9:14pm
And she's blessed him even if he feels a bit drained. It's well worth it. Thanks DWP!
20th Jul 2015 9:11pm
Soft sexy write, sir crow..
I am pleasantly astounded at your perfect flow & contented metaphor use..
"Enigma Rose" indeed, I luv this blessing of endless entendre.. ;)
best O days to you misterz! *listin ur beaut, ty.
~d
20th Jul 2015 9:10pm
Thanks for the listing and eloquent comment Darksighs. Enigma Rose is a character who pops up now and then in my work. She's usually pretty vicious, but this time...
20th Jul 2015 9:47pm
22nd Jul 2015 9:32pm
20th Jul 2015 10:35pm
22nd Jul 2015 9:33pm
WOW!! Ya see luv,, this is the crow I came to love! This is Dark,powerful and perfect!
I mean the strong strokes from ur pen where just Crazy vivid, it all went precisely in tune, not one bump!
Fanfuckingtastic Thomas in the list!!!
Good greif u is a sexy BITCH!!!
loved this!
Zazzles xoxox
22nd Jul 2015 9:37pm
You make me want to sermonize, my sweet. Thanks Jackie. Your comment made my day!
23rd Jul 2015 1:04am
21st Jul 2015 00:36am
Ahhh, crowfly, luv ~ :-*
This is so cleverly done. What a brief delicious interlude with such sacredly profane tithing... ;-*
And, you end so poignantly. Luv, this poem is a tiny, brilliant ray, and you its ingenious creator. :-*
This is so cleverly done. What a brief delicious interlude with such sacredly profane tithing... ;-*
And, you end so poignantly. Luv, this poem is a tiny, brilliant ray, and you its ingenious creator. :-*
22nd Jul 2015 9:40pm
Thanks Savaja. You have quite a way with commentary. "Sacredly profane tithing." I'll pass the collection plate...
23rd Jul 2015 00:26am
Hmmm...I believe you already did, luv, and were sucked quite dry. ;-p
Mayhap, twas a bit more than 10% after all, eh? Tithes just aren't the same these days; you were taken for all you had...
Mayhap, twas a bit more than 10% after all, eh? Tithes just aren't the same these days; you were taken for all you had...
23rd Jul 2015 00:38am
Very true. Inflation might have something to do with it. I'm always willing to give even if I get taken for a ride.
23rd Jul 2015 1:37am
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22nd Jul 2015 9:42pm
Even Enigma can be merciful. I just wish she'd drop by more often. Thanks Taryn!
21st Jul 2015 5:53pm
No, the rhyme and rythym were not the least bit gimmicky, I understand that fear. A blessed poem lol. Sensual, seductive, sinful just the way I love it. Will certainly be reading more of you! 💋 I ejoued the humor in it as well.
22nd Jul 2015 9:44pm
Might be a mixed blessing from the sacred to the profane, but have to have a bit of fun don't we? Thanks Jennifer!
5th Aug 2015 4:15am
Good cadence, the rhythm was effective in keeping the hunger-pace on. It's always a trip when we genuflect to our own muses and then anthologize the private love affairs thereof. But for how much energy is poured into Enigma Rose and focus as well, it's no wonder there'd be bounce-back.
