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Sudden Death
Whispering next door
giggles and moans
the familiar encouragement
and joy of union
with the squeaking bed
she listens
her eyes sad and then lustful
she sighs
her nipples harden
then she goes into lustland
at the breakfast table
she looks at them
sister and brother in law
they hardly look at her
they hold hands
she feels her rawness
and looks at him
and then at her
bitch! she is her twin
but she wants her so
memories of then
when they were together
tasting each other
two in one
kisses and love.
*this poem was entered in a competition here. thank you for reading*
giggles and moans
the familiar encouragement
and joy of union
with the squeaking bed
she listens
her eyes sad and then lustful
she sighs
her nipples harden
then she goes into lustland
at the breakfast table
she looks at them
sister and brother in law
they hardly look at her
they hold hands
she feels her rawness
and looks at him
and then at her
bitch! she is her twin
but she wants her so
memories of then
when they were together
tasting each other
two in one
kisses and love.
*this poem was entered in a competition here. thank you for reading*
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Re: Sudden Death
4th Jun 2015 11:27am
Are you in some way saying she is lusting after her twin in an incestuous way? That's pretty ballsy. And hella disturbing. Disturbing indeed.
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4th Jun 2015 12:13pm
That was the theme of the competition...Forbidden Lust. The lusting is disgusting really.:) thanks for reading FindingZoe.
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4th Jun 2015 1:01pm
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Anonymous
4th Jun 2015 3:39pm
I love your writing regardless of the topic,well done.
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5th Jun 2015 4:58pm
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Anonymous
4th Jun 2015 7:51pm
me too so far..haven't read anything of yours I didn't like Grace..twin incest is pretty creepy too..lol
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5th Jun 2015 4:59pm
Oyes...creepy Insanewrite. Read Dean Koontz. One of the books called The Bad Place tell a bit about incest and more. Creepazoids abound.:0 thanks for reading.:)
Re: Sudden Death
4th Jun 2015 9:11pm
Yep, twin incest would be considered taboo in certain circles. Fun to read about though. Thanks for pushing this boundary.
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re: Re: Sudden Death
5th Jun 2015 5:00pm
Incest is taboo all over the world I think. Weird that I thought of that.:) went with the competition theme though. thanks Crowfly.
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Anonymous
5th Jun 2015 3:33pm
yeah and as she said, that's what the contest called for..pushing boundaries..and she did it masterfully...
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Anonymous
7th Jun 2015 8:23pm
nice writing, Grace
enjoyed :)
enjoyed :)
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14th Jun 2015 5:44pm
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Anonymous
15th Jun 2015 6:13am
Thank you, Grace. I miss you when I'm gone too. Life has just been really busy :) xx
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