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Rising
she was close
so close he could feel her breath
he knew he couldn't touch her
he wanted to live inside her
he waits for it
his heart was open
beating crimson mist
she knew she would wear his love
feverishly inside her walls
she waits for it
so close he could feel her breath
he knew he couldn't touch her
he wanted to live inside her
he waits for it
his heart was open
beating crimson mist
she knew she would wear his love
feverishly inside her walls
she waits for it
Published 2nd Jun 2015
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2nd Jun 2015 2:18am
I take this as emotional or sexual longing. Probably more emotional if "he knew he couldn't touch her." Fascinating short poem, beautifully written.
2nd Jun 2015 2:37am
Definitely emotional. I'm very happy you liked it crowfly.
Thank you for your comment and for
reading me. :)
Thank you for your comment and for
reading me. :)
2nd Jun 2015 3:12am
I would give you half my sandwich, just to cop a feel. Maybe half of my devil dog too !
Awesome ink Ms. T
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Awesome ink Ms. T
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2nd Jun 2015 3:25am
I'll take the devil dog! What kind of sandwich
are you talking about? Make it a good one
and I'll let you use both hands ;)
Too funny Push,always making me smile.
Thank you my friend :)
are you talking about? Make it a good one
and I'll let you use both hands ;)
Too funny Push,always making me smile.
Thank you my friend :)
2nd Jun 2015 3:32am
For you, maybe a lobster roll or a spicy Vietnamese pork entry. It will be goooood
2nd Jun 2015 3:34am
2nd Jun 2015 3:45am
2nd Jun 2015 4:00am
high drama, tension, feeling it here. & I can't rise so much for the falling...
2nd Jun 2015 12:31pm
2nd Jun 2015 6:58pm
Well worth the wait. This passage is deeply sensual and often felt:
"he wanted to live inside her"
Thank you Tommie!
"he wanted to live inside her"
Thank you Tommie!
2nd Jun 2015 7:53pm
