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Knock,knock...Knock.
I wonder if you're there,
standing behind the wooden door
breathing softly,
standing so still.
I knock again
this time a bit louder
listening for a sound
searching for shadows
through the cracks.
Breathing deep
I knock three times
and wonder if you care.
standing behind the wooden door
breathing softly,
standing so still.
I knock again
this time a bit louder
listening for a sound
searching for shadows
through the cracks.
Breathing deep
I knock three times
and wonder if you care.
Published 29th Apr 2015
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29th Apr 2015 10:31pm
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29th Apr 2015 11:36pm
Knock, knock. Is that you Orlando? Knock three times if you remember :) This is a beautiful poem. :)
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30th Apr 2015 7:14am
More times than I am comfortable to admit I have stood at that door knocking...hoping she cares, hoping she will answer. Wondering if she is hiding behind the door...waiting for me to leave.
This may not be the intended tone of your poem, but I feel this.
I like this a lot.
This may not be the intended tone of your poem, but I feel this.
I like this a lot.
30th Apr 2015 8:08pm
Anonymous
30th Apr 2015 1:18pm
this is why they've made doorbells with annoying chimes...
... harder to ignore than a knock laden with emotion
simply loved this, Mister Hash
... harder to ignore than a knock laden with emotion
simply loved this, Mister Hash
30th Apr 2015 8:11pm
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1st May 2015 11:58pm
a beautiful, loving poem Hashman...
love the analogy of knocking at the door...
love the analogy of knocking at the door...
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4th May 2015 6:12pm
to a small extent this reminds me of George Harrison's "Behind That Locked Door", the key difference is Harrison seems to be addressing negativity rather then indifference.
5th May 2015 8:35pm
Anonymous
5th May 2015 5:59am
Sadly, it's relatable Mr Hash. I don't think there's anyone out there who hasn't been on the other side of the door, knocking in vain, hoping to be heard.
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