deepundergroundpoetry.com
retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
this is not my face
with the tired lines
framing watery eyes
or the chapped lips
bitten raw & bleeding
this is not what i
will bring home to you ~
... but i am still, in some ways,
all the ways that count
the child you found
hiding in the shed
trying to cover my tears
*
now i'm more broken than
the chaos i'll walk into
but i crave the comfort
only home brings to
those who wander aimlessly
i need the azov to wash away
everything i've become ~
... but i am still, in some ways,
all the ways that count
the lost girl along the coast
staring out at the shallows
& praying for more depth ...
//
with the tired lines
framing watery eyes
or the chapped lips
bitten raw & bleeding
this is not what i
will bring home to you ~
... but i am still, in some ways,
all the ways that count
the child you found
hiding in the shed
trying to cover my tears
*
now i'm more broken than
the chaos i'll walk into
but i crave the comfort
only home brings to
those who wander aimlessly
i need the azov to wash away
everything i've become ~
... but i am still, in some ways,
all the ways that count
the lost girl along the coast
staring out at the shallows
& praying for more depth ...
//
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 13
reading list entries 3
comments 22
reads 627
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
15th Apr 2015 9:38pm
A time for healing found only in the place of origin, the center of your universe no matter how far you have orbited away. I love this, and have tried to find words to describe this feeling several times. I think you captured it so perfect. Now I have nostalgia and a cold spot inside that wants to go home and start over.
1

re: Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
15th Apr 2015 9:41pm
it's an off the cuff scribble but i'm glad it's made some kind of impact...
... cheers for reading, Sammy
... cheers for reading, Sammy
Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
15th Apr 2015 9:43pm
So striking and beautiful in every way ^^
When we are broke we must run back home for healing :-)
A lot of good poetry lately on dup :-)
When we are broke we must run back home for healing :-)
A lot of good poetry lately on dup :-)
1

re: Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
16th Apr 2015 10:45am
freaks, perverts & lunatics abound but the writing's good ...
... cheers for swinging by DC
... cheers for swinging by DC
re: re: Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
16th Apr 2015 4:13pm
re: re: re: Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
16th Apr 2015 4:31pm
Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
15th Apr 2015 9:47pm
I feel for that lost little girl. Sad indeed. I did a Google search for "azov" and came up with a Ukrainian military battalion. I suspect that the Azov may be a river, washing away everything you've become. A lot more poetry that way, albeit melancholy, and lovely.
1

re: Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
16th Apr 2015 10:50am
Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
15th Apr 2015 11:21pm
Great write, but there's nothing the-fuck wrong with you, besides the demons you let take over and say there is.
Lovely write, my dear...
Lovely write, my dear...
1

re: Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
16th Apr 2015 10:52am
i probably could have phrased it differently... but it would be less amdram if i did
cheers for reading Ed
cheers for reading Ed
Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
16th Apr 2015 1:11am
I see a girl who knows this ache wasn't meant for her; it must be someone else's agony she feels. wonderful...
1

re: Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
16th Apr 2015 10:53am
Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
Anonymous
16th Apr 2015 1:16am
<< post removed >>

re: Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
16th Apr 2015 10:54am
Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
17th Apr 2015 5:29am
Praying for more "More depth" huh!!??? My beauty
It's be near impossible to find another with the depth you
possess...I'm just saying... :)
It's be near impossible to find another with the depth you
possess...I'm just saying... :)
1

re: Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
17th Apr 2015 7:55am
gods you're just shameless with all that flattery Poe lolz
thank you muchly for reading
thank you muchly for reading
Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
17th Apr 2015 5:30am
great stuff, Kid
your talent is outstanding, you're a credit to this place. well done
" this is not what i
will bring home to you"
^ this is powerful and it's kinda smothered, might read well on its own, might not
your language is beautiful, almost subtle but glaring in places. these last few weeks your writing is beyond brilliant
...I'm waffling
great stuff, kid, keep shinnin'
your talent is outstanding, you're a credit to this place. well done
" this is not what i
will bring home to you"
^ this is powerful and it's kinda smothered, might read well on its own, might not
your language is beautiful, almost subtle but glaring in places. these last few weeks your writing is beyond brilliant
...I'm waffling
great stuff, kid, keep shinnin'
1

re: Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
[i can't function when looking at that hat... i'm just sayin]
i am a credit to a certain writer here who pushed me to change, come out of my shell & stop hiding behind cheap tricks, so thank you for that Eam...
... i got the same about the final stanza, so it would seem an edit is in order at some point. i shall get on that at my earliest convenience [&] fix this mess
*
cheers for the kind words, craic, i've always been lucky to have a good muse, regardless of the emotions he may pull from me
anyhoo, thanks for dropping by to read, much appreciated
i am a credit to a certain writer here who pushed me to change, come out of my shell & stop hiding behind cheap tricks, so thank you for that Eam...
... i got the same about the final stanza, so it would seem an edit is in order at some point. i shall get on that at my earliest convenience [&] fix this mess
*
cheers for the kind words, craic, i've always been lucky to have a good muse, regardless of the emotions he may pull from me
anyhoo, thanks for dropping by to read, much appreciated
Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
Anonymous
17th Apr 2015 7:16am
Tragic yet hopeful. Sad and beautiful...
Awesome piece of poetry, katja :)
Awesome piece of poetry, katja :)

1

Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
17th Apr 2015 8:05am
Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
17th Apr 2015 9:53pm
re: Re: retreat ~ [//hideaway//]
23rd Apr 2015 12:18pm