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Heat
And when I was finished,
satisfied the dead couldn't arise
up and dance around the fire
I'd created within to attract your
attention.
The heat of which had you swaying
in the right direction till my fires put
under your control and I was no more
the devils apprentice but your guardian
angel as you slept.
satisfied the dead couldn't arise
up and dance around the fire
I'd created within to attract your
attention.
The heat of which had you swaying
in the right direction till my fires put
under your control and I was no more
the devils apprentice but your guardian
angel as you slept.
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Re: Heat
1st Apr 2015 6:08am
From devil's apprentice to angel, assured the dead wouldn't rise ... Wow!
Bravo!
Bravo!
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1st Apr 2015 6:15am
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1st Apr 2015 9:41am
I love the spin at the end Rose, " I was no more
the devils apprentice but your guardian
angel as you slept"... beautifully done.
the devils apprentice but your guardian
angel as you slept"... beautifully done.
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1st Apr 2015 3:06pm
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1st Apr 2015 3:07pm
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Kl flip liked it but of course the devil himself was once a angel in this crazy world we now live in anything is possible i suppose ha
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Anonymous
1st Apr 2015 1:32pm
oh...well done! very well done! from devil's apprentice to guardian angel. perfect.
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1st Apr 2015 3:09pm
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21st Sep 2015 12:18pm
A twinkling ending to a wonderful poem. Excellent work in my humble opinion. You're quite right as well - the angel and devil are never very far apart from one another.
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21st Sep 2015 12:52pm