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The lonely prayer of love
who wants this ode of cruelty?
only to be buried
thats so much wasted hearts
in the end we all plea for mercy
not to take that bullet in the head
as it seperates me and you
so lets get the coffin
and the two hearts
lets say a few prayers
to the god whos deaf and blind
hold on tight say a few words
or ask a question why
even if no ones listening
only to be buried
thats so much wasted hearts
in the end we all plea for mercy
not to take that bullet in the head
as it seperates me and you
so lets get the coffin
and the two hearts
lets say a few prayers
to the god whos deaf and blind
hold on tight say a few words
or ask a question why
even if no ones listening
Published 16th May 2011
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18th May 2011 8:55pm
not to sound patronizing 666, but i do think this is one of the more mature poems that you have written, the context and content both support this.
i am not sure i understand why you have started the third line with 'thats' the fourth fifth and sixth lines are exceptional.as is the last stanza.
well done!
i am not sure i understand why you have started the third line with 'thats' the fourth fifth and sixth lines are exceptional.as is the last stanza.
well done!
