deepundergroundpoetry.com
Our Anniversary
I’m so excited
We've been married for a year!
We went out to dinner,
Took a walk by the beach,
Started talking and laughing by the shore.
When we got home,
It was time to exchange gifts.
I gave him mine first.
A new wallet and the Xbox game he wanted.
Then it was my turn.
I could hardly wait.
He told me to close my eyes,
And to hold out my hands.
I did as he said.
I heard him struggling so it must be something big!!
Oh I could hardly wait!
But then I was confused.
There was a terrible pain in my stomach.
I opened my eyes and looked down.
There was a knife in my stomach.
Blood was spurting out.
My husband was dead on the floor
Then I noticed the man
My ex.
Holding a gun up to his head.
Crying.
Just before I died,
He said,
You should have been mine.
And he shot himself.
We've been married for a year!
We went out to dinner,
Took a walk by the beach,
Started talking and laughing by the shore.
When we got home,
It was time to exchange gifts.
I gave him mine first.
A new wallet and the Xbox game he wanted.
Then it was my turn.
I could hardly wait.
He told me to close my eyes,
And to hold out my hands.
I did as he said.
I heard him struggling so it must be something big!!
Oh I could hardly wait!
But then I was confused.
There was a terrible pain in my stomach.
I opened my eyes and looked down.
There was a knife in my stomach.
Blood was spurting out.
My husband was dead on the floor
Then I noticed the man
My ex.
Holding a gun up to his head.
Crying.
Just before I died,
He said,
You should have been mine.
And he shot himself.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 5
reading list entries 0
comments 16
reads 890
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
Re: Out Anniversary
26th Mar 2015 2:38pm
"Just before I died"? That would make you a ghost! This is a grim tale, PoisonApple. I hope this is entirely fictitious!
1
re: Re: Out Anniversary
26th Mar 2015 3:07pm
Re: Out Anniversary
26th Mar 2015 2:54pm
Wow! Lots of death in this one! I honestly don't think you are a ghost... UNLESS..... Nah never mind. Great poem though
1
re: Re: Out Anniversary
26th Mar 2015 3:08pm
Re: Our Anniversary
26th Mar 2015 3:21pm
Wow that escalated quickly. jeje.
I loved this!!
Great Piece!
Darker.
I loved this!!
Great Piece!
Darker.
1
re: Re: Our Anniversary
26th Mar 2015 5:14pm
Re: Our Anniversary
blimey fun anniversaries in your house!!
i'll remember this when my man says close your eyes
though with him its usually a zipper I hear
and thank you Sir I say afterwards..
but thats another story indeed xD
i'll remember this when my man says close your eyes
though with him its usually a zipper I hear
and thank you Sir I say afterwards..
but thats another story indeed xD
1
re: Re: Our Anniversary
26th Mar 2015 5:14pm
Re: Our Anniversary
26th Mar 2015 5:46pm
Re: Our Anniversary
28th Mar 2015 2:33am
I shot myself but i'm still alive, sorry 'bout your husband, and yourself, those anitpsychotics didn't work very well... You still love me right? Right? RIGHT?! :P Nice write poison :)
1
re: Re: Our Anniversary
28th Mar 2015 2:43am
ARE YOU INSANE!!! YOU SHOT MY HUSBAND AND STABBED MEEEE!!!!! Get some better meds man and get out of my life!!! Restraining order didn't work very well either as i can see. !! :) Hahahahahahahahaha thanks so much for the laugh!!!
re: re: Re: Our Anniversary
2nd Apr 2015 5:12am
Re: Our Anniversary
Anonymous
30th Mar 2015 9:56pm
Brilliant write, Poison.. really a fan of your writing..
Dave
Dave
1
re: Re: Our Anniversary
30th Mar 2015 11:51pm
Re. Our Anniversary
Anonymous
7th Nov 2016 2:35pm
<< post removed >>