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Carmen
(Magdalena and Alexander Case, collaboration)
Carmen was warm
she was honey
she was snow
silhouettes fell upon amber walls
eyes spluttered twin flames
in soft agitated light
the night trap was set
ajar by the window
where Carmen waited
for the candlelight to snuff it
when darkness found her pane
she doused it in paraffin
marked the seal with a kiss of death
and placed the scarlet flint and propane
at five corners
circled with an infinite line
she inhaled visions of chance and destiny
then let the sleeping acid settle in her stomach
seething in the depths of her chamber
Carmen fell back onto her eiderdown
engulfed in its plush embrace
mascara strained lashes fought
against the pull of the other-world
drawn by fingers of a thief
who broke into her nighttimes
to crush dreams with glass and steel
like a repetitive stroke
from tragic hands of loss and lucky escapes
life pinned down in a place
where her body breathed alone
frozen in the wreckage of refuge
with no connection
the innocence of youth fell like broken wings
thrust down and crumbled into rubble
at her feet
her flightless lover
was torn from her side
summonsed to appear before catastrophe
where he was stolen and reborn
a guardian with nine lives
Carmen is immortal
she is queen
she is stone
Written by Magdalena and Alexander Case
(Thank you so much Alexander you did an excellent job with this)
Carmen was warm
she was honey
she was snow
silhouettes fell upon amber walls
eyes spluttered twin flames
in soft agitated light
the night trap was set
ajar by the window
where Carmen waited
for the candlelight to snuff it
when darkness found her pane
she doused it in paraffin
marked the seal with a kiss of death
and placed the scarlet flint and propane
at five corners
circled with an infinite line
she inhaled visions of chance and destiny
then let the sleeping acid settle in her stomach
seething in the depths of her chamber
Carmen fell back onto her eiderdown
engulfed in its plush embrace
mascara strained lashes fought
against the pull of the other-world
drawn by fingers of a thief
who broke into her nighttimes
to crush dreams with glass and steel
like a repetitive stroke
from tragic hands of loss and lucky escapes
life pinned down in a place
where her body breathed alone
frozen in the wreckage of refuge
with no connection
the innocence of youth fell like broken wings
thrust down and crumbled into rubble
at her feet
her flightless lover
was torn from her side
summonsed to appear before catastrophe
where he was stolen and reborn
a guardian with nine lives
Carmen is immortal
she is queen
she is stone
Written by Magdalena and Alexander Case
(Thank you so much Alexander you did an excellent job with this)
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Re: Carmen (Magdalena and Alexander Case, collaboration)
18th Mar 2015 9:48pm
re: Re: Carmen (Magdalena and Alexander Case, collaboration)
22nd Mar 2015 9:02am
Re: Carmen (Magdalena and Alexander Case, collaboration)
22nd Mar 2015 7:11am
real power with words here - brutal brilliance - words are not supposed to be palatable and pretty they are supposed to communicate and sometimes people need to be forced to feel - good solid write Magcase - don't stop now!!!
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re: Re: Carmen (Magdalena and Alexander Case, collaboration)
22nd Mar 2015 9:04am
Ah thank you so much Whale, for such a great and inspiring comment.
It is truly appreciated :)
It is truly appreciated :)
Re: Carmen (Magdalena and Alexander Case, collaboration)
23rd Mar 2015 2:20pm
Magda, thank you for giving me an opportunity to do this collab with you. What you gave me to work with was dark and profound in both quality and content, so I'm stoked if you think I stepped up to the challenge and did your poem justice.
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re: Re: Carmen (Magdalena and Alexander Case, collaboration)
You're most welcome. I'm pleased I passed it over to you and I definitely think you stepped up to the challenge.
Thanks again.
Thanks again.
Re: Carmen (Magdalena and Alexander Case, collaboration)
27th Mar 2015 5:43pm
Quite speechless...having the effect of a dark surrealistic setting where an intense n v.earthly emotive love however brutal n sad n dark, gets tactfully juxtaposed in strange worlds n outerworlds of dream, I death, rebirth, immortality n whatnot..by you two brilliant poets! The free structure quite suits the required flow, the opening n ending are quite striking. Very deeply constructed lines all over, but these ones caught me more, "circled with an infinite line" n the whole stanza as beliw juz stands my fav (seems v.much of one of my own many strange dream dejavus)
"Carmen fell back onto her eiderdown
engulfed in its plush embrace
mascara strained lashes fought
against the pull of the other-world
drawn by fingers of a thief
who broke into her nighttimes
to crush dreams with glass and steel
like a repetitive stroke
from tragic hands of loss and lucky escapes"
juz a masterpiece frm u two..my bows to Mag n Case,.. ( And guess what nw, u had made me hungry fr my own collab poem ever, thou wouldnt be of your such grt outcomes)
Tq Mag n Case fr de share:) xx
"Carmen fell back onto her eiderdown
engulfed in its plush embrace
mascara strained lashes fought
against the pull of the other-world
drawn by fingers of a thief
who broke into her nighttimes
to crush dreams with glass and steel
like a repetitive stroke
from tragic hands of loss and lucky escapes"
juz a masterpiece frm u two..my bows to Mag n Case,.. ( And guess what nw, u had made me hungry fr my own collab poem ever, thou wouldnt be of your such grt outcomes)
Tq Mag n Case fr de share:) xx
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re: Re: Carmen (Magdalena and Alexander Case, collaboration)
Thank you so much Uma, for a wonderful and detailed review. Your time and comment is truly appreciated. :)x
And hey, I'm always up for collabing with you.
And hey, I'm always up for collabing with you.
Re: Carmen (Magdalena and Alexander Case, collaboration)
27th Mar 2015 8:14pm
i enjoy collaborations when they are done to such exquisite detail. well done, brilliant read.
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re: Re: Carmen (Magdalena and Alexander Case, collaboration)
28th Mar 2015 11:03am
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29th Mar 2015 00:29am
re: Re: Carmen
29th Mar 2015 9:13am
I just read your comment on Alexander's page. Thank you muchly John. Greatly appreciated.
Re: Carmen
10th Apr 2015 12:35pm
A master piece i do believe.However despite of my unknown existence i have a much like of your poems
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re: Re: Carmen
17th Apr 2015 9:47am
Thank you very much Dracken. It was great creating this piece with Alexander. So pleased we collaborated.
Re. Carmen
4th Jan 2016 8:37pm
dies**** ahhh how i wish i can write as well as you so amazing and well written
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Re: Re. Carmen
5th Jan 2016 00:15am
Ah, this one was a joint effort between myself and Alexander. Thank you very much.
Re. Carmen
Anonymous
6th Aug 2017 10:50pm
OK, this was completely mind blowing and i feel extremely gratified
thank you sooo much for guiding me to this one well
muwah merci!
thank you sooo much for guiding me to this one well
muwah merci!

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6th Aug 2017 10:55pm