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Consummating
fingers linger
tongue and lips
stroking stroking
touching tits
I am rising
you spread wide
rub rub rub
I slip inside
with my fingers
with my tongue
with my yearning
almost cum
sweet sensations
cascading
in nerve endings
we're both in
touch with feelings
burning fires
consummating
our desires
with our fingers
with our tongues
with our yearning
we both cum
tongue and lips
stroking stroking
touching tits
I am rising
you spread wide
rub rub rub
I slip inside
with my fingers
with my tongue
with my yearning
almost cum
sweet sensations
cascading
in nerve endings
we're both in
touch with feelings
burning fires
consummating
our desires
with our fingers
with our tongues
with our yearning
we both cum
Published 21st Feb 2015
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21st Feb 2015 2:29am
Fun at the very least
I do enjoy the rhyming
Though the eroticism seems a little lost on me
Would it be unfair to claim this as crude?
I like crude in all honesty, crude, sleazy or at least naively simple yet truthful to our own inability to properly word such desires.
It feels close to being a good piece
I think the 3rd and 4th line prevent me from taking it too seriously
But then as I said, it is fun
Maybe that's more important here
I do enjoy the rhyming
Though the eroticism seems a little lost on me
Would it be unfair to claim this as crude?
I like crude in all honesty, crude, sleazy or at least naively simple yet truthful to our own inability to properly word such desires.
It feels close to being a good piece
I think the 3rd and 4th line prevent me from taking it too seriously
But then as I said, it is fun
Maybe that's more important here
