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Barrel Gazing
Barrel gazing point blank range
This black hole at the end of carbon steel
An eye of impenetrable midnight
The Colt doesn't waver, even twitch
Just stares me down
Rock steady under the rear security light
The old man smiles pleasantly
"Maybe you should just leave, son
Maybe look for another line of work"
All I can do is walk away
Just a glance back
Towards a gentle man in rent-a-cop gear
Offering guidance for a fresh career.
This is for Crim's "When Death Comes Knocking" competition
This black hole at the end of carbon steel
An eye of impenetrable midnight
The Colt doesn't waver, even twitch
Just stares me down
Rock steady under the rear security light
The old man smiles pleasantly
"Maybe you should just leave, son
Maybe look for another line of work"
All I can do is walk away
Just a glance back
Towards a gentle man in rent-a-cop gear
Offering guidance for a fresh career.
This is for Crim's "When Death Comes Knocking" competition
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17th Feb 2015 1:22am
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17th Feb 2015 1:26am
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Anonymous
17th Feb 2015 2:09am
I appreciate the difference in gentle man from gentleman. They can sometimes be quite different. Glad that dude walked away.
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17th Feb 2015 4:20am
There is such a thing as second chances. Sometimes it requires human intervention.
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17th Feb 2015 3:55am
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17th Feb 2015 4:21am
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17th Feb 2015 6:25am
I enjoyed this, very interesting, it has a beat
Good luck in the comp Crow
Always
Zazzles xoxox
Good luck in the comp Crow
Always
Zazzles xoxox
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18th Feb 2015 2:31am
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17th Feb 2015 8:53am
Atypical career counselling at its best! I imagine this would certainly be quite persuasive and motivating.
Great poem Crowfly.
Great poem Crowfly.
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18th Feb 2015 2:34am
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17th Feb 2015 6:52pm
Nothing like facing death to really re focus your endeavors, !! Great Job Crow!
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18th Feb 2015 2:35am
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27th Feb 2015 11:44am
Whoa. This is heavy, and resonates right in the stomach. You kept steady though. Good for the walk, comrade.
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27th Feb 2015 6:50pm
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17th Mar 2015 5:29pm