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Delightful
And then he'd say..
'I'll be the judge of that,'
as if my thoughts being transmitted
neon lighted to the bedroom wall.
And him, awake to it all,
like the sun and moon on the
rise, he would
ending it as always with a broad
expectant grin,
the love devil glint in his eye
as he gazed, looked on,
'delightful..truly beautiful' he'd whisper
as I stood by the door
my grand entrance made.
'I'll be the judge of that,'
as if my thoughts being transmitted
neon lighted to the bedroom wall.
And him, awake to it all,
like the sun and moon on the
rise, he would
ending it as always with a broad
expectant grin,
the love devil glint in his eye
as he gazed, looked on,
'delightful..truly beautiful' he'd whisper
as I stood by the door
my grand entrance made.
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Re: Delightful
Anonymous
15th Feb 2015 7:00pm
oh i like this! almost cheeky. it made me smile. very nice, rose. very nice!
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15th Feb 2015 8:33pm
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15th Feb 2015 11:47pm
The gent here sounds enthralled with this woman, an entering goddess. But it's his reaction that you focus on, and he seems like more of a lewd spectator than a lover. Delightful job, Rose.
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16th Feb 2015 5:39am
No how id see it
i know from experience when I've dressed up
on thise nights or dressed down being the operative word here then I'm loved adored worshipped as with any given moment we decide to make love
he's being appreciate of me
and yes if he comes across as being lewd or sordid then that be his right it'll only be me he's lewd for
my entrance always grand
and he will always be appreciative of my love
and I his
Delightful comments i love your take on this piece xD
i know from experience when I've dressed up
on thise nights or dressed down being the operative word here then I'm loved adored worshipped as with any given moment we decide to make love
he's being appreciate of me
and yes if he comes across as being lewd or sordid then that be his right it'll only be me he's lewd for
my entrance always grand
and he will always be appreciative of my love
and I his
Delightful comments i love your take on this piece xD
Re: Delightful
16th Feb 2015 8:47am
An entrance to certainly savour!
i love the lines describing thoughts travelling like neon lights - fantastic imagery.
Great poem.
i love the lines describing thoughts travelling like neon lights - fantastic imagery.
Great poem.
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