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An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee 3313
(This is a collaboration with Deborahlee 3313.
This is my first collaboration, and her encouragement
and guidance were invaluable. My stanzas are indented,
and alternate with hers. She begins and ends the poem,
just as it should be.)
An internal storm is brewing
slowly raging behind my eyes
inside me no smooth sailing
only dark and cloudy skies
She seems outwardly so calm
but her eyes begin to dance
lightning in perfect blue
I can't help but take a chance
My tempestuous soul screams
my carnal appetite increased
my entire body in turmoil
I need help to tame the beast
She sits with compact power
but her body language will not lie
that need won't be contained
why would she even try?
An internal storm is brewing
growing in its erotic intensity
we can take shelter in each other
that is if you have the propensity
There's an invitation in her smile
Her intent is not concealed
No taking shelter from her storm
So soon to be revealed
With every touch and every taste
passion escalates beyond measure
as bodies tingle from goose bumps
we share a tempest of primal pleasure.
This is my first collaboration, and her encouragement
and guidance were invaluable. My stanzas are indented,
and alternate with hers. She begins and ends the poem,
just as it should be.)
An internal storm is brewing
slowly raging behind my eyes
inside me no smooth sailing
only dark and cloudy skies
She seems outwardly so calm
but her eyes begin to dance
lightning in perfect blue
I can't help but take a chance
My tempestuous soul screams
my carnal appetite increased
my entire body in turmoil
I need help to tame the beast
She sits with compact power
but her body language will not lie
that need won't be contained
why would she even try?
An internal storm is brewing
growing in its erotic intensity
we can take shelter in each other
that is if you have the propensity
There's an invitation in her smile
Her intent is not concealed
No taking shelter from her storm
So soon to be revealed
With every touch and every taste
passion escalates beyond measure
as bodies tingle from goose bumps
we share a tempest of primal pleasure.
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Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee 331
10th Feb 2015 6:07pm
WOW! sounds like you and Deborah are dancing on new ground, exploring the trust factor.
But you are not ready to accept and trust yet...
She is raging inside, and u want to take cover from the storm and protect her
but she is the storm...
exceptional expression here guys!!
Zazzles xoxox
But you are not ready to accept and trust yet...
She is raging inside, and u want to take cover from the storm and protect her
but she is the storm...
exceptional expression here guys!!
Zazzles xoxox
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re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee
10th Feb 2015 6:10pm
Yes, she is the storm, a force of nature and a fine poet. I'll forget about the shelter.
re: re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Debora
10th Feb 2015 6:11pm
I really enjoyed seeing u venture into new territory Crow ")
WRITE ON!!
Zazz
WRITE ON!!
Zazz
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re: re: re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with De
10th Feb 2015 6:23pm
Thanks, Zazz. Have to keep experimenting. It's fun and educational. And write on to you too! You do wonders, both with Frank and flying solo.
re: re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Debora
10th Feb 2015 8:10pm
OMG what an amazing thing to say
love the edited version
am about to change mine as well
love the edited version
am about to change mine as well
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Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee 331
Anonymous
10th Feb 2015 6:22pm
look at you two go! this is erotic and fun and lightning! good on you guys. very, very good!
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re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee
10th Feb 2015 6:26pm
Thanks, Minerva. Deborah supplied the lightning, and I was struck three times, once for each of my stanzas.
re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee
10th Feb 2015 8:11pm
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10th Feb 2015 8:12pm
Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee 331
10th Feb 2015 7:05pm
re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee
10th Feb 2015 7:12pm
Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee 331
love it
did not think I could like it more than I already did but...I DO
thank you again for working with me!!!
can not wait to see what you come up with for us for the next piece
did not think I could like it more than I already did but...I DO
thank you again for working with me!!!
can not wait to see what you come up with for us for the next piece
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re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee
10th Feb 2015 8:48pm
re: re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Debora
um...
wow I can not believe you said that...
she don't just rain she pours
that girl right there's the perfect storm.
(do you know the song Thomas?)
wow I can not believe you said that...
she don't just rain she pours
that girl right there's the perfect storm.
(do you know the song Thomas?)
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re: re: re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with De
10th Feb 2015 9:20pm
Never heard it that I recall. I picked that up from the title of a movie, "The Perfect Storm," in which George Clooney and all hands on deck get swept away. Ever see that one? I also think it could be a meteorological or nautical term. I'll look it up.
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10th Feb 2015 9:29pm
Okay. Wikipedia defines "perfect storm" as "a rare confluence of events that drastically aggravates a situation." So I take it back. You didn't aggravate anything. You made it easier!
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re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee
10th Feb 2015 11:47pm
Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee 331
11th Feb 2015 1:10am
Very well written, I love the way it flows! I enjoy rhyme myself, so this was an amazing read.
"My tempestuous soul screams
my carnal appetite increased
my entire body in turmoil
I need help to tame the beast"
Wow!! I love this, I look forward to reading more of your works, and future collaborations.
"My tempestuous soul screams
my carnal appetite increased
my entire body in turmoil
I need help to tame the beast"
Wow!! I love this, I look forward to reading more of your works, and future collaborations.
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re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee
12th Feb 2015 5:47pm
I enjoy rhyme too. I try not to force it so that it just gets in the way and interferes with the theme. But sometimes I just can't resist.
Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee 331
11th Feb 2015 1:28am
re: Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee
12th Feb 2015 5:47pm
Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing (a collaboration with Deborahlee 331
11th Feb 2015 2:48am
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12th Feb 2015 5:48pm
Re: An Internal Storm Is Brewing
12th Feb 2015 5:26pm
a tempest of an erotic beautiful collaboration bravo to you both with love Crim
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12th Feb 2015 5:49pm