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Just lines in the sand
Why can't people understand,
Life is too short,
You get what you bought,
You, play your hand,
You land where you land
If it's in a pit with the shit,
Or on a stand looking grand
Whatever you be,
Wether in land
Or at sea,
A prostitute,
A paladin,
A man of god
Or a man of sin...
You get what you bought,
You land where you land,
Nothing matters,
Just lines in the sand.
Life is too short,
You get what you bought,
You, play your hand,
You land where you land
If it's in a pit with the shit,
Or on a stand looking grand
Whatever you be,
Wether in land
Or at sea,
A prostitute,
A paladin,
A man of god
Or a man of sin...
You get what you bought,
You land where you land,
Nothing matters,
Just lines in the sand.
Published 6th May 2011
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6th May 2011 7:52pm
Inhumanely reductivist and calmy logical at the same time. Though which one were you attempting to evoke out of interest? I like this piece but feel that it might be better with something about how lines in the sand are blown away and meaningless to reinforce the idea.
30th Oct 2011 6:35pm
I think I was trying to apply calm logic to something that was making me feel passionate/overwhelmed.
20th Dec 2011 2:03am
i find
how long a life i live-
its when ideas of how
out or in things are, stay stagnant
that all goes by so fast...
but think
a child vulnerable and milked
every one of us have been
and all the lives in one we all had since then.
who i have been?
lines in the sand.
may a lovely breeze erase my lines
and feet draw me again
how long a life i live-
its when ideas of how
out or in things are, stay stagnant
that all goes by so fast...
but think
a child vulnerable and milked
every one of us have been
and all the lives in one we all had since then.
who i have been?
lines in the sand.
may a lovely breeze erase my lines
and feet draw me again
1st Feb 2012 8:08pm
This is quite wafty, I like to think a good counter-point to my poem as I was trying to be succint and jarring.
12th Jun 2012 2:44pm
sort like something a mad monk/anti-hero buddhist would write haha
cool piece!
cool piece!
12th Jun 2012 6:39pm
