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the girl who never was
sun rises. sun sets
moon waxes & wanes
sadness follows sadness
but no one complains
days of lyrical fog
nights of surreal mist
a gentle hand was never held
sweetest lips were never kissed
pieces of tomorrow
that lovers take
there never was
a heart to break
the flowering fields
the meadows fair
don’t look for her
she isn’t there
a harvest of stars
a sheaving of years
stillborn shadows
of silence & tears
not a waltz to dance
nor a song to sing
a canvas of no colors
no girl.
no poem.
nothing
Published 17th Jan 2015
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Anonymous
17th Jan 2015 11:29pm
it's like a wisp of a sad dream that you are trying desperately to hold onto, but just can't remember the details. oh my heart! so sad.
18th Jan 2015 1:19am
This seems quite a departure from your noir side, and it's a gem. Lines like "Days of lyrical fog / nights of surreal mist" give it a gothic mood, but there's more to it than that. You've gone to take a melancholy journey.
18th Jan 2015 2:14am
18th Jan 2015 3:17am
18th Jan 2015 6:30am
a poignant & relatable piece, Mister Feddeler
"days of lyrical fog
nights of surreal mist a gentle hand was never held
sweetest lips were never kissed"
achingly lovely indeed
"days of lyrical fog
nights of surreal mist a gentle hand was never held
sweetest lips were never kissed"
achingly lovely indeed
18th Jan 2015 6:36am
18th Jan 2015 6:41am
Anonymous
18th Jan 2015 10:01am
seems these words come out of the fog ad dance through my mind..lovely work-I can relate to the emptiness-this is a place I often visit but I'm glad I don't live there!
write on!
write on!
18th Jan 2015 12:19pm
18th Jan 2015 12:42pm
This space u finally lead me over..called Nothing....that holds more than anything. N its not such a constancy too, for it fills n empties n so on. I am reminded of a wolverine (tokyo drift i hope) talk," nothing is without meaning" which i often rewrite within myself as, "even 'nothing' is with meaning".
classic read n yes, not ur usual story style but more poetic. Tq JF:)
classic read n yes, not ur usual story style but more poetic. Tq JF:)
18th Jan 2015 1:22pm
Breathtaking poem, John. Swept me away, pastel coloured pictures arose, held my mind captive. Love it.
18th Jan 2015 3:24pm
18th Jan 2015 5:41pm
"the flowering fields
the meadows fair
don’t look for her
she isn’t there"
Wow, this is a very stoical poem. Desolate feelings pour over me. Thank you for sharing! <3
the meadows fair
don’t look for her
she isn’t there"
Wow, this is a very stoical poem. Desolate feelings pour over me. Thank you for sharing! <3
18th Jan 2015 8:42pm
You've done it again...JF...
A beautiful touching write...the illusion shattered...
A beautiful touching write...the illusion shattered...
18th Jan 2015 11:01pm
you've got this one tied up and solid..nice work clap clap curtsy bow..........
19th Jan 2015 1:59am
the flowering fields
the meadows fair
don’t look for her
she isn't there
You're killing me John, I just love this, the entire sonnet in fact, it was beautiful...
Zazzles xo
RL
the meadows fair
don’t look for her
she isn't there
You're killing me John, I just love this, the entire sonnet in fact, it was beautiful...
Zazzles xo
RL
19th Jan 2015 8:56am
Oh my! my heart is aching.
How touching,beautiful,sad and visual this is.
soft.x
How touching,beautiful,sad and visual this is.
soft.x
19th Jan 2015 3:37pm
26th Jan 2015 12:11pm
what a stunningly crafted poem! it floats through you....excellent write!
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22nd Mar 2015 4:56am
It is truly beautiful, yet so sad, how humans can mourn something that never even happened. An unborn child that was never born can bring tears to a hard man's eyes... A quixotic romance that was never begotten can make a chest ache as though there were an organ failure... A girl that never was garners so much sympathy...
I will never understand, but then again, if I did, it'd likely not be quite so interesting.......
Job well done. It's truly a masterpiece... This really got me thinking.
I will never understand, but then again, if I did, it'd likely not be quite so interesting.......
Job well done. It's truly a masterpiece... This really got me thinking.
11th Oct 2017 6:45pm
Nothing I can add to the above, so, I will just put this away to once again bask in it's glow sometime in the future.
