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Forgotten Song
we are the new blood
a line that is drawn
forced into brutality
etched within the stone
dying on the altar
screaming with madness
fragments of the living
bestowed upon the dead
razor blades and irony
marks scar my wrists
a scab of anger
tormented deep inside
you drove me to this
blinded by absent words
a code of fiction
imprints my own reality
the mask of ignorance
reflections in my eyes
humbled by a distraction
this rationalized freedom
my hero’s are long gone
erased by the gods
a note on a scale
of a forgotten song
a line that is drawn
forced into brutality
etched within the stone
dying on the altar
screaming with madness
fragments of the living
bestowed upon the dead
razor blades and irony
marks scar my wrists
a scab of anger
tormented deep inside
you drove me to this
blinded by absent words
a code of fiction
imprints my own reality
the mask of ignorance
reflections in my eyes
humbled by a distraction
this rationalized freedom
my hero’s are long gone
erased by the gods
a note on a scale
of a forgotten song
Published 7th Jan 2015
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7th Jan 2015 3:48pm
enjoyed reading this
on my forth read now
so much to absorb
to be honest some of your work i've found to be okish but thats just me xD
but this is very good
for me it's on my list :)
on my forth read now
so much to absorb
to be honest some of your work i've found to be okish but thats just me xD
but this is very good
for me it's on my list :)
7th Jan 2015 4:02pm
Thanks, Rose.. Glad you enjoyed this.. i appreciate the commentary, and the add.. This is kinda my usual writing style.. I've been experimenting some, just trying some different approaches.. But i appreciate your honesty..
Dave
Dave
7th Jan 2015 4:26pm
It's a good thing to try with other styles
I'm forever swapping and changing, some work some don't
but over all happy with what I write and so should you be xD your a good writer indeed :)
I'm forever swapping and changing, some work some don't
but over all happy with what I write and so should you be xD your a good writer indeed :)
7th Jan 2015 4:30pm
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7th Jan 2015 7:21pm
I can feel it. To me, that is true poetry. Enjoyed reading it. I love the dark stuff, personally. Thanks for sharing.
7th Jan 2015 7:26pm
Thanks for stopping by.. Glad you enjoyed, i appreciate your kind words..
Dave
Dave
8th Jan 2015 00:00am
excellent write :-)
can feel the pain your words, well used, brings a strong dark atmosphere
really enjoyed it :-)
can feel the pain your words, well used, brings a strong dark atmosphere
really enjoyed it :-)
8th Jan 2015 2:06am
Thanks, David.. Glad you enjoyed.. I appreciate your commentary.. glad you stopped by..
Dave
Dave
8th Jan 2015 3:33am
8th Jan 2015 3:39am
Thanks, Dani.. I appreciate your kind words.. You're talented as well..
Dave
Dave
10th Jan 2015 1:23am
With the subject going from a "we" to "you" and "my", questions arise; just who is a part of the collective "we", and what entity is responsible for "driving you to that"?
The absence of the hero further marks the overall feeling of a person void of any stable presence, like a piece of wood forever drifting out at sea.
The absence of the hero further marks the overall feeling of a person void of any stable presence, like a piece of wood forever drifting out at sea.
11th Jan 2015 00:52am
Jazz, you ask a great question.. this is more of a rant.. but feels connected somehow..
Dave
Dave
11th Jan 2015 4:12am
10th May 2016 4:24am
Intriguing... A bit adrift as a message, tho it is pertinent throughout. Enjoyable read. Keep Grindin CAOS737
10th May 2016 9:02pm
