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gazing
he saw her
and his gaze followed
her everywhere
she went
she was all at once
intrigued by it
flattered
amused
and unsure
so she fled from it
and his gaze followed
her everywhere
she went
she was all at once
intrigued by it
flattered
amused
and unsure
so she fled from it
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Re: gazing
4th Jan 2015 3:11pm
A trivial scene so lovely transformed into an intriguing poem. So very well done, JeJe!
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re: Re: gazing
6th Jan 2015 4:47am
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re: Re: gazing
6th Jan 2015 4:49am
Re: gazing
This is my favorite type of poem, short and deep. A combination only obtained by magic... ;)
Loved it...
Loved it...
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re: Re: gazing
5th Jan 2015 11:32pm
Thank you much Fenom for the read...and such thoughtful comments & add to your list...humbled and honored 😊
Re: gazing
6th Jan 2015 00:35am
re: Re: gazing
Thank You JohnFeddeler for the read and thoughtful comments, much appreciated ...yes,she chose caution...😊
Re: gazing
28th Jan 2015 12:25pm
what a lovely write, some people embrace the moment and some are intimated by it. nothing wrong with caution either. excellent poem.
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re: Re: gazing
29th Jan 2015 00:51am
Thank You Mark Anthony for dropping by and leaving such thoughtful comments...much appreciated...