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"Carousel"
Clouds, low, dark, thick
Drops form, soon
Appearing
Outside
Inside
By a carousel
She bends to retrieve luggage
Plucked by a long, firm, familiar hand
He was waiting, watching, admiring behind
Her, having made this trip
Valuable, spending
Time
Moments
Invested, combined
Together, conversation, passion
Thick, drops form, soon appearing outside
*December 19, 2014*
Published 20th Dec 2014
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20th Dec 2014 7:29pm
21st Dec 2014 6:12pm
Extraordinary rhythm, just right, capturing the crowded rounds of the luggage carousel and the inner luggage of hope and desire. Airports are so restless, claustrophobic and constantly deferring release to the expanding oases imagined just outside an airport's imprisoning doors.
21st Dec 2014 6:15pm
Well said, candycrier.
Thank you for sharing your kind
and encouraging review.
Thank you for sharing your kind
and encouraging review.
21st Dec 2014 7:20pm
23rd Dec 2014 7:48am
You could see? ;)
Kate, are you stalking me? :D
I take your visualization as a high compliment.
Thank you!
Kate, are you stalking me? :D
I take your visualization as a high compliment.
Thank you!
21st Dec 2014 9:16pm
Oooooo EV.......wonderful sensaul write.......what a great day this must have been......thank you for sharing......xo :)
23rd Dec 2014 7:54am
Thank you, ES!
It was a great day, and every
day following.
Always appreciate your kind remarks.
xo
It was a great day, and every
day following.
Always appreciate your kind remarks.
xo
