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on depression
Sicilian opera
masterminder plucks my strings
soporific limbs revived for yet another show
an audience blind to the man in the dark
pacified by eyes and a smile carved by callous hands
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reading in the dark
tracing my skin as if it were braille i realize i'm indecipherable
i claw at it
rewriting the cells cast by everyone's eyes
he says
take my pills
smooth again
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profiled
I wake sucking his hard steel
wanting an explosion in my mouth
says he can't love me
wife and kids
he's not gay
a cop
he left his gun
sucking
Entered in the "on depression" (30 word count) competition hosted by mikimoondancer
Published 7th Dec 2014
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7th Dec 2014 2:06pm
7th Dec 2014 7:14pm
Thanks for the nod, each vignette is a portrait of someone I know - so I hope it rings true beyond the competition
7th Dec 2014 8:26pm
This is really powerful. Each part lending more meaning to the parts that come after it. In my own way, I can relate the the picture painted here. I really strong write you've got going on here.
Thank you Miss Indie - your words on this mean so much because I respect your pen immensely.
10th Dec 2014 9:43pm
Your writes here are really good, LSP, makes me feel I gotta step up my penning lol :)
7th Dec 2014 9:29pm
Left me breathless. Such a powerful and captivating write, LSP. Impressive!
Luck for the comp!
Luck for the comp!
10th Dec 2014 10:42am
Thank you for your comment and well wishes ... There are many great writes in the comp - this is definitely a time where I'm most satisfied by the write and comments from those I respect.
7th Dec 2014 11:28pm
10th Dec 2014 10:45am
Thanks Paul S. - these all represent personal glimpses on one level or another so I hope they ring true ... I appreciate your comments
8th Dec 2014 1:27pm
The overall depth of the depression....inked with such intensity...yet individuality impressive within each separate vignette!
"Reading in the Dark" affected me on a rather deeply personal level...tragic sadness in struggling to be comfortable with one's self...
My very best to you in the comp, mo Chara
"Reading in the Dark" affected me on a rather deeply personal level...tragic sadness in struggling to be comfortable with one's self...
My very best to you in the comp, mo Chara
10th Dec 2014 10:50am
My great hope was that anyone who read these could find a part they could relate to ... The first is most me ...
We poets seem to know the depths of love and sorrow so well ... Hope you're finding the peace you need Mo Chara
... I'm trying lol
We poets seem to know the depths of love and sorrow so well ... Hope you're finding the peace you need Mo Chara
... I'm trying lol
14th Dec 2014 6:56am
dangerous stuff. depth in brief glimpses, quick as a camera's shutter.
we all take pills for something, they don't get us better, they just get us through...
we all take pills for something, they don't get us better, they just get us through...
14th Dec 2014 7:07am
"just get us through" ... This is so true, yet so many of us beg for that small sliver daily.
