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The Words He Spoke
The words he spoke to me
Became tantalizing
As he penetrated me mentally
Giving him a piece of my mind gracefully
As I continue pronouncing
Every vowel, silently, until his flow begins streaming
Without hesitation devouring his nutrients for which I sought
I guess he gave me food for my sodden thoughts
The words he spoke to me
Left me submissively subdued
As he groped me elicitly
His brown eyes focused as he kept me hypnotically wooed
Dominating my body
Speaking fluently
As his words spoke seductively
Stuttering as he's consuming me
I can't help but listen to the words he spoke to me
Writhing, as he spoke long stories
Engrossed in passion as I'm melting
In his palms, as he continues consuming
Of what I can't describe thoroughly
Because when he took another toke
He swallowed me slowly
With delight, In my mind I could never forget the words he spoke
Published 9th Nov 2014
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9th Nov 2014 00:41am
Welcome to DU:)
Overall I really like this,
You express the seduction and domination in a way that's sexy and smoldering whilst keeping it subtle enough to add a hint of mystery.
only one correction: pronouncing.
Xx
Overall I really like this,
You express the seduction and domination in a way that's sexy and smoldering whilst keeping it subtle enough to add a hint of mystery.
only one correction: pronouncing.
Xx
9th Nov 2014 1:24am
9th Nov 2014 2:19am
14th Nov 2014 6:01am
I must agree with everything Harley said above... your poem here is a very sexy bit of verse, and erotically charged too, smoldering with pure passion and worded exquisitely, like a tasty meal to be savored by any connoisseur of fine poetry. It is a magnificent poem to include under your first submitted works to here! Nothing like a hot read to get things started. Welcome to the site... methinks you'll do great works here. :D
17th Nov 2014 2:03am
Thanks for your feedback. I like constructive criticism. Especially the good ones! The welcome is greatly appreciated.
17th Nov 2014 2:42am
Words are powerful things. They can do so much in the proper sequence. Enjoyed.
6th Feb 2021 2:01am
Seduction is a powerful ally and a dangerous weapon when it's held in the wrong hands. It can make sweet memories that swing with you in your tree or it can bring down the house of cards crashing. Very thorough and fulfilling write. I do enjoy this very much....
