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Discovery

You have me in your possession, grasp,
holding dominion over my spirited fight,
the battle lost, I'm within your sight.

I would but fall for you, never to return if
your caress were stay for a breath longer,
to fade away from your heart now would
be solitary in beat, a lonesome voyage,
without discovery, without recovery.

Keep holding on to me, please.

Written by Lookawaynow

(Rose)

Published 3rd Nov 2014

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Re: Discovery

Harpalycus

3rd Nov 2014 11:59am

I find the rhythm a little staccato, perhaps that is what you wanted. I very much liked the ending however.
Simple, direct and all the more powerful for it.