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Anamnesis
Sleep sweet longing,
I shall tuck you
pleasantly, in
your deathbed.
† to my Dearest 22/2/2010
I shall tuck you
pleasantly, in
your deathbed.
† to my Dearest 22/2/2010
Published 21st Apr 2011
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Anonymous
21st Apr 2011 10:33pm
Short and sweet. Love it! :)
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21st Apr 2011 10:37pm
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21st Apr 2011 10:39pm
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21st Apr 2011 11:28pm
indeed i have.
i've been receiving your messages but couldn't reply back by the way
i've been receiving your messages but couldn't reply back by the way
22nd Apr 2011 1:48am
Anonymous
22nd Apr 2011 7:33am
the shortest ones always seem to hit the hardest. I think I felt a chill.
22nd Apr 2011 5:03pm
I like that 'pleasantly' and 'deathbed' when put so close together create this dissonant effect. It's like a lullaby with a slightly jarring note at the end.
8th May 2011 8:56pm
The emotion you brought to this was interesting. Obviously from the heart, and meaningful enough without reason to elongate.
The only things I would suggest is to make the first line a little bit more clear, but I can also wonder if it was intentional.
Splendid, emotional piece. Well done, and I'm sorry.
The only things I would suggest is to make the first line a little bit more clear, but I can also wonder if it was intentional.
Splendid, emotional piece. Well done, and I'm sorry.
8th May 2011 10:43pm
10th May 2011 1:15am
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