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Venetian Ecstasy
(artwork suggested by lilsouthernbelle)
she was a doll in masquerade
and I was a marionette
the night was a Sybarite revelry
the champagne was laced with regret
the ‘Goodnight Waltz’ was playing
the music held us in thrall
harlequins and gypsies were dancing
and violins wept in the hall
we were the victims of passion
the scandalous moonlight brings
my heart made a song of her beauty
and she cut away my strings
she teased with her sparkling eyes
the saccharine taste of her kiss
the wind would whisper our secrets
the stars would witness our bliss
her inhibitions fell with her garments
as we set to the lovers’ task
but she kept an air of intrigue:
she never removed her mask…
Published 8th Oct 2014
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8th Oct 2014 2:24am
Love the imagery as always! Excellent ending with the intrigue! Enjoyed!
8th Oct 2014 3:17am
Oh Mr Feddeler.....be still my beating lil heart
U have created a masterpiece sir. Thank u so much for bringing this to life for me. Its even better than i ever dreamed darlin
U have created a masterpiece sir. Thank u so much for bringing this to life for me. Its even better than i ever dreamed darlin
8th Oct 2014 4:52am
exquisite, both in content and its thrilling pace. much enjoyed Mister Feddeler
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8th Oct 2014 7:35am
Ah John ... that's a special piece for me since it's connected to Venice which I came to love. Your verses are so beautiful and contain rich images of passion, seduction and restraint. A wonderful work. Again. Enjoyed it much!
8th Oct 2014 11:12am
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8th Oct 2014 12:22pm
WOW!!!
What an incredible picture (love the mask) and your words John are simply magic!
I hear the music playing as two people lost in eachother's eyes dance....at that moment, there is no one else in that room.
What an incredible picture (love the mask) and your words John are simply magic!
I hear the music playing as two people lost in eachother's eyes dance....at that moment, there is no one else in that room.
8th Oct 2014 7:27pm
Beautiful, and the artwork is mysteriously sexy. Bravo, once again! Adoring it, deeply.
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9th Oct 2014 5:34am
This is really good. You set the scene and paint the pictures very well, all the while keeping to form. Great
9th Oct 2014 6:42am
i usually do not like rhyming poetry. this was enjoyable. i like the punchline. cheers
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15th Oct 2014 9:15pm
Trying to imagine them at it with a mask like the one in the pic still on. Beautiful words and pic, the last line the punchline.
4th Nov 2014 8:28am
my heart made a song of her beauty
and she cut away my strings Loved all of this. But these two lines almost turned me into a romantic. Beautiful
and she cut away my strings Loved all of this. But these two lines almost turned me into a romantic. Beautiful
20th May 2015 3:53pm
enjoyed the image of
"sweet doll, packs scissors"...!!
And?
my kind of *romantic for sure!
You provoke hot-forbidden near end, keeping mystery in the mask...lovely aspect!
;)
~d
"sweet doll, packs scissors"...!!
And?
my kind of *romantic for sure!
You provoke hot-forbidden near end, keeping mystery in the mask...lovely aspect!
;)
~d
