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black tears
betrayal is ahead,
my dear,
we shall soon be dead...
i can't anymore look back and turn,
my heart,my dear,
soon they will burn...
sorrow fills my eyes- dead soul without fears,
my scorched heart,
i buried it in the sea of black tears
my dear,
we shall soon be dead...
i can't anymore look back and turn,
my heart,my dear,
soon they will burn...
sorrow fills my eyes- dead soul without fears,
my scorched heart,
i buried it in the sea of black tears
Published 16th Apr 2011
| Edited 4th Feb 2012
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4th Feb 2012 1:38am
good flow. uncreative... same words n ideas have been decorated before. "i can't any more
look back and turn" 'can't n and' won't fit in 1 phrase. therefore 2 different lines or a pause...
look back and turn" 'can't n and' won't fit in 1 phrase. therefore 2 different lines or a pause...
