Danse Macabre #5

A defiant tone, I sense here, to match those who flail against their loss. The dead know death, but the living know loss.

A gem wrapped around the bitter light of grief, Craic. I like it.

Cheers, Lady
 
Those moments where one finds oneself in the depths of reflection, an endless litany of questions without the luxury of an answer. some find solace within leaves of a holy book, some snarl, spit and throw a fist to the sky. what do I know, nothing that's what.

thanks for the drop-by and your thoughts, Miss  

Very deep Lep , different for you but still good! Xoxo

ahh, Miss Gigi, diggin' the flattery

thanks most much for the kind words, dear lady

To question...to pick up any grain that feels to the self as truth-eternal learning-That is what I hope for.

This was Wicked Lepp-and deep in a short ink.
Quite Masterful Good Sir!!!

wise words mr soulteaser, easier said than done. in my case it takes a dark quiet place and a couple of splifferoons to set the tone, there's an old Chinese saying loosely translates 'it's incredible to think' I think it speaks volumes

really appreciate your encouragement good fellow, thanks most much    

Youse a good wryter greene Mann
Nyce won rm

you're an interesting character RM, glad to have your acquaintance. thanks for the words  

Those who say don't know and those who know can't say...

But they always do it
These self righteous, never been there and ougtta shut it types, they shove it out by the loads

This piece really throws its weight about and is relentless in its raw honesty

Your talent as a writer is inspiring, I always get something out of your work .
Shine on dude!

Missus Moon

you're shaking your fist at one of them :) I've yet to experience loss of the kind of magnitude the words relate to, but I can feel it coming (if that makes sense), and it's a powerful thing so I jot it down.

interesting thing (I think) about the above is that the middle stanza is sandwiched by what is essentially four cliches (?)  or at the very least well worn phrases:

only the dead truly know death

all and sundry

tell you a thing or two

and who live and breathe

I think it works ok enough to have repeated the first stanza, feels comfortable to read, probably wouldn't get away with such a blatant chain of phrase like that too many times though

thanks most kind for the visit and words Missus Moon.

shine on yourself    

  
 
So the piece is peppered with perfection really so critique would be hard to give. Though I do agree with the need to repeat the first stanza only. Anymore would be rather silly. But I was wondering why you started the last "for" in lowercase when the others above where caps? silly observation really.  
 
nice stuff this, it's wonderfully dark and yet easy to read, at the same time.  
 
Thanks for read!

That's pretty powerful stuff, Al. thanks for that. I think the exclamation marks do good things for the overall tone of the piece. I found this on youtube but there's no words in it:   http://youtu.be/z0glOYQBlSA

I hadn't noticed the caps, god bless your eyesight. I put the #5 in the title because it touches upon the fifth stage

appreciate your eyes and thoughts here, Al. thanks  

 

I often use that quote "only the dead know death" to those who say "when you're dead you're dead and there is nothing" But, I also question that, because if there is nothing, then not even the dead would know.
I have my own theories on death nonetheless, being, the body is the host and the only part of "us" that has a shelf life.

A real life piece Eammon and a sad reality that we all face.  Great stuff Mister :)

cheers, Magda

that’s a good point, I think I’m of the same mind as you regarding the hosting, perhaps there is a moment  during the transition that we know what’s going on

thank you kindly for your visit, and your thoughts dear Lady  

intensely thought provoking!

you’re very kind, Jazzman

thanks for dropping in and leaving your thoughts

I love how you write, indeed with such exact and precise tone in every word Lepp, it's kinda like mater of fact type vibe i get from you which is a good thing it sets a style that's all you and that's always a good thing.
I feel your words and in truth I like your poetry I really do Sir.
I enjoyed this very much...
Zazzles

Zazzles

I think sometimes I might fall into the trap of trying to sway a reader to see more of one side of a coin than another( especially in my observational geopolitical musings, which is a bad thing)  so I'm trying to develop an unbiased matter of fact type voice that I hope can be employed to all future writings

thanks most much for your visit and kind words

That's on point , very much on point , love it

kind of you to say, G to the G, thank you most much

Have been entranced here, am feeling it in my lining,  powerful

am happy to entrance, dear lady. you're most kind

thank you heaps and bushes for dropping by and leaving your thoughts  

Wow. Sometimes unfettered wailing is all that's left to do; you've captured it beautifully here!

thank you, Miss. going  from what I've heard and observed I believe you are right. strikes me as a kind of purge  of sadness which makes room for something else organic


many thanks for dropping by and leaving your footprint

Very powerful words. I enjoyed it!

Truly profound...and hauntingly beautiful.  
Willow