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Empty Freedom
Empty freedom
Is this what you thought?
By giving me freedom?
Is this what you were taught?
About a person’s feelings
And about their fragile heart?
Through empty closure
Our paths do untimely part.
You thought wrong
In your gentle plans
For you I still long
But could you know?
A broken love song
Etched upon my heart
All is now wrong.
My heart, my love is lost
But you are safe and secure
Ignorant of the rending cost
In your vain own castle
I am a toppled king
From my throne of love
A broken sad thing.
The promise broken
A poem, for me?
An empty token
Your face of glee
Mine was oaken
False sympathy.
I am jealous of you
And all you do
The love wasn’t true
Not enough for you
What can I do?
Love a cursed brew.
Is this what you thought?
By giving me freedom?
Is this what you were taught?
About a person’s feelings
And about their fragile heart?
Through empty closure
Our paths do untimely part.
Is this what you thought?
By giving me freedom?
Is this what you were taught?
About a person’s feelings
And about their fragile heart?
Through empty closure
Our paths do untimely part.
You thought wrong
In your gentle plans
For you I still long
But could you know?
A broken love song
Etched upon my heart
All is now wrong.
My heart, my love is lost
But you are safe and secure
Ignorant of the rending cost
In your vain own castle
I am a toppled king
From my throne of love
A broken sad thing.
The promise broken
A poem, for me?
An empty token
Your face of glee
Mine was oaken
False sympathy.
I am jealous of you
And all you do
The love wasn’t true
Not enough for you
What can I do?
Love a cursed brew.
Is this what you thought?
By giving me freedom?
Is this what you were taught?
About a person’s feelings
And about their fragile heart?
Through empty closure
Our paths do untimely part.
Published 29th Oct 2009
| Edited 7th Feb 2019
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18th Jul 2011 5:46pm
It's fun seeing the early works of some of the "bigger names" of modern day DUP. I have to say this one didn't blow me away.
It has some good moments, but overall it made me feel empty in a bored way, not empty in a had-my-heart-ripped-out-and-don't-know-what-to-put-in-its-place kind of way.
Interesting none-the-less.
It has some good moments, but overall it made me feel empty in a bored way, not empty in a had-my-heart-ripped-out-and-don't-know-what-to-put-in-its-place kind of way.
Interesting none-the-less.
18th Jul 2011 8:48pm
I do not go back to look at my poems. Often they are borne of the moment and don't stand the test of time. This was merely to vent and sound romantically pathetic, nothing more.
If I didn't feel so empty in a bored way, so energyless and will-less, I would change it. Though I would have to suffer heartache again to rewrite this.
If I didn't feel so empty in a bored way, so energyless and will-less, I would change it. Though I would have to suffer heartache again to rewrite this.
