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EAGLE
Show me a crystal that is clear or a clear way worth walking
Or a forgiveness appreciated that was just given away
Or a wise word heard when foolish men are talking
Or a prize valued more than love that was not prised away.
Then show me bright lights, make up, entrance and stage exit
Show me nights we existed, entranced, dreamed of, made love,
Blue moon, rainbow, or a star fall that sheamed like a bullet
And I'll show you an eagle that found the peace of a dove.
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in complete honesty, i initially had a problem with a few word choices, but after several reads, i am entirely wrapped into the spirit of this thing
there is a real ethereal, real something floating under this thing...and i find it lovely
thank you for the read
there is a real ethereal, real something floating under this thing...and i find it lovely
thank you for the read
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Thank you for that honesty LB - the oft repeated words of poetry can be cloying but they're repeated because they mean something to us all - and love is all... and its about the girl I love named Eagle
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11th Aug 2014 10:57pm
I like the rhyming, it's something
that, when well used, is a great
tool to keep on you...
it's a really attractive piece...
that, when well used, is a great
tool to keep on you...
it's a really attractive piece...
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12th Aug 2014 4:30am
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12th Aug 2014 5:58am
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12th Aug 2014 3:12pm
With my music saturated brain, this reminds of The Pretenders' song, "Show Me".
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12th Aug 2014 9:47pm
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12th Aug 2014 7:51pm
It has a serenity about it. Love penetrating a hard man's heart. Good write Whale.
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12th Aug 2014 9:49pm
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Anonymous
13th Aug 2014 00:01am
Both eagle and dove I see, the symbolism is almost magical and the whole creates an almost holy image.....amazed by this poem!
One more for my reading list!
One more for my reading list!
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13th Aug 2014 00:45am
Yes love - alchemical, magical - it transforms everything - it is what makes the seeker seek and let's the seeker find - thanks Mourganna for the careful read
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14th Aug 2014 5:56pm
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14th Aug 2014 9:47pm
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15th Aug 2014 8:58pm
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16th Aug 2014 1:31am
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17th Aug 2014 1:21pm
As promised i dropped by and am impressed!There is no greater wisdom,prize,strength or purity that supersede that of love!
-Love=Vanity!
-Love=Vanity!
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17th Aug 2014 1:56pm
Ha ha - yes so much we see is jus a reflection of our love for ourselves (or otherwise...) - so glad you stopped by Lady Pen - I much enjoyed your comments!
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21st Aug 2014 3:41am
...your second stanza was weaved together so beautifully, Whale! I had to sigh....
Enjoyed! Xo
Enjoyed! Xo
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21st Aug 2014 8:34am
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31st Aug 2014 10:52pm
Searching for something, not knowing what's missing, but sensing it's gone. It can take years to realise that love was always there waiting, waiting for a lover to find themselves.
Whale, if your poetic mind was used for evil, it would be on the worlds most wanted list of criminal masterminds, infamous for capturing the minds of your readers and holding them to ransom, until they'd pay for your latest release of poetry collections.
Well done, Sir. I'm adding this romantic kidnapper to my reading list.
Whale, if your poetic mind was used for evil, it would be on the worlds most wanted list of criminal masterminds, infamous for capturing the minds of your readers and holding them to ransom, until they'd pay for your latest release of poetry collections.
Well done, Sir. I'm adding this romantic kidnapper to my reading list.
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19th Oct 2014 5:55am
from you whose every step is authentic and seeks truth - I am truly grateful that Case
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28th Jul 2015 6:04am
Wow, this is a wonderful mystic piece.
With every ounce of honesty in my marrow, I truly feel serene. Thank
you for writing such peacefulness.
Bowing unto...
With every ounce of honesty in my marrow, I truly feel serene. Thank
you for writing such peacefulness.
Bowing unto...
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29th Nov 2016 4:49pm
Congratulations, Whale! This poem was selected as our 'Weekly Featured Poet's Poem of the Week' on our facebook page! You may view it at the link below!
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