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The Stripper
The old beat up sign blinked
Pink and green neon glared
You could barely make it out
But it said....
"SWEET SOUTHERN GIRLS NUDE"
It quickly caught his attention
He wondered just how sweet
These lil girls could be
It was so dark and smokey
He could barely see a thing
Except for HER under the spotlight
Just her and a pole-centerstage
She was elegance incarnate
Hayworth, Taylor and Monroe combined
An out of place diamond
Hidden away in this hole in a wall
Entranced as he sat and observed
Golden hair, emerald eyes, perfect pouty lips
He was under her spell
With her every move, he moved too
As she diappeared behind the curtain-he paniced
Would he see her again?
Grabbed a napkin and jotted down a note
"Please allow me just one drink. No strings attached.
Just beg to look at your beauty for a fleeting moment
In time."
She was touched by his gesture
She had grown use to more crude remarks
She scribbled this quick reply
"Darlin' I'll be ALL yours in just a bit."
Drinks, laughs....some light back and forth
He was falling and falling hard
The conversation grew more flirtatious
Totally filled with yummy innuendos
She responded fo his every word in kind
All of his advances met with a smile
Not sure whose idea it was
But soon they were leaving together
Once alone at his place
She gave him a private dance
Her offerings were melodic
She reached down for him to join her
As they swayed in time as one
She undressed him
Slowly one button at a time
Exposing his rapidly heaving chest
Picked her up, carrying her to his bed
Looking into her eyes as he placed her down
At that very moment
They both knew that she would never leave
Long passionate kisses unsued
Each devouring the other
It was obvious to both
This was for keeps
Pink and green neon glared
You could barely make it out
But it said....
"SWEET SOUTHERN GIRLS NUDE"
It quickly caught his attention
He wondered just how sweet
These lil girls could be
It was so dark and smokey
He could barely see a thing
Except for HER under the spotlight
Just her and a pole-centerstage
She was elegance incarnate
Hayworth, Taylor and Monroe combined
An out of place diamond
Hidden away in this hole in a wall
Entranced as he sat and observed
Golden hair, emerald eyes, perfect pouty lips
He was under her spell
With her every move, he moved too
As she diappeared behind the curtain-he paniced
Would he see her again?
Grabbed a napkin and jotted down a note
"Please allow me just one drink. No strings attached.
Just beg to look at your beauty for a fleeting moment
In time."
She was touched by his gesture
She had grown use to more crude remarks
She scribbled this quick reply
"Darlin' I'll be ALL yours in just a bit."
Drinks, laughs....some light back and forth
He was falling and falling hard
The conversation grew more flirtatious
Totally filled with yummy innuendos
She responded fo his every word in kind
All of his advances met with a smile
Not sure whose idea it was
But soon they were leaving together
Once alone at his place
She gave him a private dance
Her offerings were melodic
She reached down for him to join her
As they swayed in time as one
She undressed him
Slowly one button at a time
Exposing his rapidly heaving chest
Picked her up, carrying her to his bed
Looking into her eyes as he placed her down
At that very moment
They both knew that she would never leave
Long passionate kisses unsued
Each devouring the other
It was obvious to both
This was for keeps
Written by
lilsouthernbelle
Published 9th Aug 2014
| Edited 16th Aug 2014
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Re: The Stripper
Anonymous
9th Aug 2014 7:20pm
I liked this... very visual, but, I wonder, if it's honest in the end?
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re: Re: The Stripper
9th Aug 2014 7:27pm
Its loosely based on the way two of my friends met. They have been happily together now for 20 yrs.
Glad u enjoyed it hun
Hugs
Belle
Glad u enjoyed it hun
Hugs
Belle
re: re: Re: The Stripper
Anonymous
10th Aug 2014 4:47am
Good to know, and glad that there's still hope out there, somewhere, for romantic endings.
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Re: The Stripper
9th Aug 2014 7:25pm
The tune "I'm in Love with a Stripper"... Played through my mind as I read this.. Although this is more lovely. Sweet, sensual write!:)
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re: Re: The Stripper
9th Aug 2014 7:34pm
Definite difference in the two for sure hun. Awesome song btw...lol
Thanx for giving me a read
Thanx for giving me a read
Re: The Stripper
9th Aug 2014 8:01pm
He saw her, not the stripper. Found her hiding behind the lace, a perfect woman in a dark place. She saw a man running in place hiding in the dark afraid of love that judges making him week. In the dark they found safety in each others hands.
Touching write, the words undressed me with a new light.
Touching write, the words undressed me with a new light.
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re: Re: The Stripper
9th Aug 2014 8:40pm
I so love your take on this hun.
You hit the nail on the head btw.
Glad u liked it darlin
Hugs
Belle
You hit the nail on the head btw.
Glad u liked it darlin
Hugs
Belle
Re: The Stripper
9th Aug 2014 11:27pm
the love story of an exotic dancer. sweet write, & it's always great to see Marilyn...
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re: Re: The Stripper
9th Aug 2014 11:52pm
Thank you so very much Mr Feddler.
I totally i agree when it comes to her.
I have absorbed any n all info on her since my preteens
I totally i agree when it comes to her.
I have absorbed any n all info on her since my preteens
Re: The Stripper
Anonymous
10th Aug 2014 1:21am
Mmm great work, enjoyed the ride
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re: Re: The Stripper
10th Aug 2014 5:42pm
Re: The Stripper
Love this read...its always a good wonder how people meet...then follow through...it felt more romantic...enjoyed heaps
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re: Re: The Stripper
10th Aug 2014 7:13pm
Ive had a lil more romance n my head as of late.
We always need to b open to people n the posibilities as to what life will bring. We never know who or what we r gonna allow to slip thru our fingers
Hugs
Belle
We always need to b open to people n the posibilities as to what life will bring. We never know who or what we r gonna allow to slip thru our fingers
Hugs
Belle
Re: The Stripper
10th Aug 2014 6:34pm
twist on the general"boy meets girl" tale .. love it.. its fantasy and truth all wrapped into one.. kudos ... with love and respect..xoxo domore
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re: Re: The Stripper
12th Aug 2014 9:02pm
Re: The Stripper
11th Aug 2014 7:29am
Belle...I loved the story line of this great romantic write and read...tyhe gentleness of the lines in the message go along way to the success of this one as attested by the number of favourable comments is so short a time...interesting I have a Stripper of my own that I am tempted to post!!!...please be safe and well...thanks and take care...Jimbo
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re: Re: The Stripper
15th Aug 2014 9:11pm
Jimbo ss always u r too kind to me. Read ur Stripper n loved it hun.
Hugs
Belle
Hugs
Belle
Re: The Stripper
Anonymous
11th Aug 2014 3:11pm
lilsouthernbelle,
Great smoky write!
tornado
Great smoky write!
tornado
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re: Re: The Stripper
16th Aug 2014 9:04am
Re: The Stripper
11th Aug 2014 7:14pm
I love the story line and the fact that your friends met in this way makes it that much better. You just never know where you're going to find love. Good write Belle.
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re: Re: The Stripper
16th Aug 2014 9:07am
Love could b lurking around any corner at any given moment. We just have to b open to it. Thank u for ur gracious comment dear friend
Hugs
Belle
Hugs
Belle
Re: The Stripper
Anonymous
15th Aug 2014 5:59pm
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re: Re: The Stripper
16th Aug 2014 9:14am
Ur comment dear Jack is so amazing that it caused me to blush. Thank u so very much. Glad u enjoyed my write along with the pic
Xoxoxo
Belle
Xoxoxo
Belle
Re: The Stripper
Echo those who have commented on the romance of the meeting. To hear from one of your replies that two friends of yours met the same way and have stayed for 20 yrs shows not all such encounters remain casual.
BTW - was the illustration a picture of Marilyn Monroe (who sometimes posed nude for photos)? Intrigued to notice an apparent scar under her right breast.
BTW - was the illustration a picture of Marilyn Monroe (who sometimes posed nude for photos)? Intrigued to notice an apparent scar under her right breast.
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re: Re: The Stripper
28th Aug 2014 4:13pm
Glad u enjoyed the true spirit of my write hun.
Yes its glorious when love is ever lasting. They have what we ALL dream of
Yes thats Marilyn. Its from a Playboy shoot. Lol....she and i have the same scar
Yes its glorious when love is ever lasting. They have what we ALL dream of
Yes thats Marilyn. Its from a Playboy shoot. Lol....she and i have the same scar
Re: The Stripper
29th Sep 2014 8:23am
After so many nights showing throwing her pearls before drunken swine...her faith in true love and real manhood is renewed. Tres romantique ma belle!
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re: Re: The Stripper
29th Sep 2014 5:28pm