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Crayons
*** AUDIO RESIDES @ http://www.soundcloud.com/jc-luff/crayons
You walked in October
the derilect changed.
the crosses and crayons
the last tone deranged
you were my favorite kamikaze
the dreams left to melt here
ten love songs ago
one more cracked word chorus
for an empty show
you were my favorite kamikaze
you were my favorite
you were my favorite kamikaze
left over clouds from neighbours messiahs
broke all my windows and tore out my eyes
I begged them to leave these broken desires
to rot where they should,
in the hospital sky
they told me to leave you
I already did,
they walked in the dressor
where my ego hid
broke all the bottles and came through the cracks
I'm so fucking wasted, thought I had you back
you were my favorite kamikaze
my favorite kamikaze
You walked in October
the derilect changed.
the crosses and crayons
the last tone deranged
you were my favorite kamikaze
the dreams left to melt here
ten love songs ago
one more cracked word chorus
for an empty show
you were my favorite kamikaze
you were my favorite
you were my favorite kamikaze
left over clouds from neighbours messiahs
broke all my windows and tore out my eyes
I begged them to leave these broken desires
to rot where they should,
in the hospital sky
they told me to leave you
I already did,
they walked in the dressor
where my ego hid
broke all the bottles and came through the cracks
I'm so fucking wasted, thought I had you back
you were my favorite kamikaze
my favorite kamikaze
Published 25th Jul 2014
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26th Jul 2014 00:12am
Real fine imagery. Words you've chosen are very interesting, as well as the whole poem, interesting. Good job here.
26th Jul 2014 00:21am
Anonymous
26th Jul 2014 00:34am
I just gave a listen to your link. I see that you've written this as lyrics but most of this can stand on its own as a poem. The imagery is most definitely thought provoking.
I think it's great that you're trying to link music with writing. Keep it up :)
I think it's great that you're trying to link music with writing. Keep it up :)
Anonymous
- Edited 26th Jul 2014 00:37am
26th Jul 2014 00:36am
JC, I really like this second music right after this one, what is it called?
it's really beautiful !!!
nvm its called tea with mao :)
it's really beautiful !!!
nvm its called tea with mao :)
"Tea With Mao" is indeed a good song from "The Boyscout Killers"... I suggest checking out "The Window"... I am most pleased that you checked my sound cloud profile. "Crayons", "Seven", and "The Window" are from 2007-2008, everything else I published there is from 2012-2014. I also suggest the works of my comrade, Jim Nut Roarin... drop by any time
26th Jul 2014 1:05am
Thank you kindly, Vee. Your opinion is most valued... glad to see you are back on DUP
