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I Wish
It weighs on me everyday
the fact that the two of you
one plus one,equals me
but you and you
equal silence
time ticks by...too fast
days are gone,moments washed away
it weighs on me
on my soul,on my heart,on my hurt
it weighs on me
the fact that you and you,are you
it weighs on me
the silence...everyday.
the fact that the two of you
one plus one,equals me
but you and you
equal silence
time ticks by...too fast
days are gone,moments washed away
it weighs on me
on my soul,on my heart,on my hurt
it weighs on me
the fact that you and you,are you
it weighs on me
the silence...everyday.
Published 19th Jul 2014
| Edited 20th Jul 2014
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19th Jul 2014 8:29pm
Oh Hash......how I know this silence......has touched me many times. I'm sorry you hurt. :( Sending luv and hugs your way. Xo :)
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20th Jul 2014 3:15am
In such a short piece i felt the weight on the heart like a ton of bricks. Nice work Mr. Hash.
20th Jul 2014 12:21pm
20th Jul 2014 1:44pm
Too familiar with this subject bro.
Sad but you expressed it profoundly
and outstandingly.
Sad but you expressed it profoundly
and outstandingly.
20th Jul 2014 4:25pm
To a small extent this reminds me of "Tick Tock" by the Vaughan Brothers. At the poem's end I thought of Simon and Garfunkel's "Sound Of Silence".
20th Jul 2014 4:27pm
20th Jul 2014 8:34pm
I wish you didn't hurt so much and I wish things can only get better for you......I wish I could make you smile because you are such a tender soul......
...This just about made me cry......all the best to you Hashman
...This just about made me cry......all the best to you Hashman
20th Jul 2014 11:54pm
Thank you for your very soothing words...this is about my two boys,half brothers(diff. moms)31 and 23 years...they just do not talk to each other much,my wish is that they will someday be closer :) (peace to you my friend)
22nd Jul 2014 1:20am
Mo Chara,
i can feel the sorrow within your lines--the palpable pain so very sharp....
If only i could find a way to heal your heart...soothe your troubled soul...
I will be keeping you in my thoughts! May there be better days ahead, for you! xo
i can feel the sorrow within your lines--the palpable pain so very sharp....
If only i could find a way to heal your heart...soothe your troubled soul...
I will be keeping you in my thoughts! May there be better days ahead, for you! xo
22nd Jul 2014 2:04pm
DarkEnchantress your words always bring much comfort...thank you so much...I always believe in better times ahead (peace forever)
