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A Liar’s Fate
What I wouldn’t give
for a razor sharp knife
to broaden your vain
and venomous smile
slicing it neatly
from ear to ear
cutting matters between us clear.
What I wouldn’t give
for a needle and thread
to re-stitch together that gaping slit
that ripped apart seam, sanguine and wet
so you’ll never ever be able for sure
to lie through your teeth any more.
Written for the 'What I Wouldn't Give' competition hosted by RainC. Voted runner-up.
for a razor sharp knife
to broaden your vain
and venomous smile
slicing it neatly
from ear to ear
cutting matters between us clear.
What I wouldn’t give
for a needle and thread
to re-stitch together that gaping slit
that ripped apart seam, sanguine and wet
so you’ll never ever be able for sure
to lie through your teeth any more.
Written for the 'What I Wouldn't Give' competition hosted by RainC. Voted runner-up.
Published 2nd Jun 2014
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Anonymous
2nd Jun 2014 8:07am
Sometimes fake things make you spit venom....
Quite the concept there, Chi!
Quite the concept there, Chi!
2nd Jun 2014 8:17am
And if it's the other one whose venom poisons your heart and soul you have to stop him/her in order to save your own soul. Hopefully things will get better soon bringing more pleasant things to my mind :-).
2nd Jun 2014 12:34pm
Dark, indeed...
and
in
deed, so to
speak...
A truly memorable
and strong piece
of work.
and
in
deed, so to
speak...
A truly memorable
and strong piece
of work.
2nd Jun 2014 1:32pm
Your sinister comment is much appreciated, Paul :-). Thanks a lot!
Yes, our thoughts and deeds,
troublesome
sometimes ...
Yes, our thoughts and deeds,
troublesome
sometimes ...
2nd Jun 2014 12:52pm
Oh. But ...
Miss Chi is rather petit and
looks quite harmless and innocent!!!
Really and truly!
Miss Chi is rather petit and
looks quite harmless and innocent!!!
Really and truly!
2nd Jun 2014 7:59pm
I HATE LIARS TOO!
Don't give me ideas Miss Chi....cause it's tempting...lol
This is intense, but I'm glad you are letting off steam here.
HUGS
Don't give me ideas Miss Chi....cause it's tempting...lol
This is intense, but I'm glad you are letting off steam here.
HUGS
2nd Jun 2014 8:11pm
That makes two of us, Lena. No! I wouldn't want to give anyone ideas! It was just my private mental cinema :-). Needed to share the 'film'. Thanks for your great comment! XX
2nd Jun 2014 9:24pm
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3rd Jun 2014 1:44pm
Miss Chi loves to sew, by the way :-). Much appreciated are your thoughts relating to my a little psycho poem. Thank you, dear Hash!
3rd Jun 2014 3:04am
Yesssssssssssssssss ... a very toothy one :-). Luckily it's just a poem but a heartfelt one. We still have coffee together and he's able to drink it without having it spilled out of any perforations, hehe.
4th Jun 2014 8:52pm
My goodness this is dark and violent! Payback I suppose! It was painful just reading it. Enjoyed.
5th Jun 2014 7:28am
I'm glad you enjoyed it! I wanted it to be violent and dark but was shocked myself about the outcome. No payback at all, just a poem. But thank you so much for your awakening contribution! We certainly do correlate people to their poems but sometimes forget that we just WRITE using our fantasy and perhaps certain moods to create poems.
8th Jun 2014 9:16pm
That's very true but it's a fine line that we walk at times and it seeps into our writing.
8th Jun 2014 9:25pm
Hmmmmmm ... yes, I have to admit that. I'm not proud of that but everyone is safe and sound :-). Thank you for giving so much consideration to this poem.
6th Jun 2014 9:46pm
Awesome piece Miss Chi!!
You keep that pen so happy!!
Never stop!!
Sir Lancelott
You keep that pen so happy!!
Never stop!!
Sir Lancelott
7th Jun 2014 10:00pm
I won't stop as long as I have to say something :-). Thank you, Lance, for stopping by and leaving your kind comment!
25th Jun 2014 4:29pm
25th Jun 2014 10:40pm
That one came to my mind within minutes. Perhaps not altogether clever but all the more heartfelt. And angry. I'm glad that you see through it and left an insightful comment.
Anonymous
9th Aug 2014 1:37pm
Very nice and dark poem.... compulsive liars are a tough breed to deal with, especially if you are romantically involved
9th Aug 2014 1:43pm
Thanks a lot, JT, for feeling the underlying disappointment. At that time it was more or less a poem written for a competition, not knowing that it would become the painful truth one day. Thanks for your lovely words.
